Fallout Equestria: Spirits

by MarbleRain

prologue

War, war never changes.

Two hundred years ago today, ponies fought for control for the natural resources no longer in abundance in their homeland only to lose everything to balefire and destruction. The effects of the great war are still felt to this day in the equestrian wasteland, ponies fight for survival out here against each other, wastelanders against raiders, heros against slavers, or steel rangers against alicorns.

I've been trying to keep my family safe from this wasteland, only for the wasteland to take them from me anyway. Raiders killed my wife and faol-naped my daughter to do unspeakable horrors to her. I've been wandering the wastes ever since, killing any Raider I find, hoping that I can find anything, just anything, that can tell me my little girl is alive somewhere.

If my time in the wasteland and as a guard pony for New Appaloosa has taught me anything. it is that war.

War never changes.

Fallout Equestria: Spirits - By: MarbleRain

Comments

[Chaos04]

two hundred years ago today, ponies fault for control for the natural resources no longer in abundance in there homeland only to lose everything to bellfire and destruction. the effects of the great war are still felt to this day in the equestrian wasteland. ponies fight for survival out here against other ponies, wastelanders verses raiders, heros verses slavers, or steal rangers versus alicorns.

Well, there should be a capital "T" for "two" and a capital "T" after the fall stop. Also, you need a capital "P" for "ponies" since there's a full stop before it. Also its not "fault" it's fought.

[Chaos04]

I've been trying to keep my family safe from this wasteland, only for the wasteland to take them from me anyway. Raiders killed my wife and faolnaped my dauter to do unspeakable horrors to her. I've been wandering the wastes ever since, killing any Rader I find, hoping that I can find anything, just anything, that can tell me my little girl is alive somewhere.

For starters, over here it's "foal-napped" and you spelt "daughter" and"raiders" wrong.

[Duchess Van hoof]

A decent start, you have a motivation for the protagonist. He's a father then? Oh, and its steel* rangers.