Velvet pulled her closer in a tight hug, her voice a whisper. "Want to have some fun?"
Love Bite chuckled nervously. “Fun?”
There was a devilish glint in Velvet’s eye when she spoke again, “Sexy and debauched fun.”

Sounds like fun!

If Love Bite can gain nutrients from lust she may be fat by the time they reach the dock...

She tentatively reached for her horn with a hoof, feeling for the odious nullifier ring that had been tightly fit at the base of her horn, but to her surprise and relief there was nothing there anymore. She found the small ring next to her bed, it was in the middle of a surgical tray, surrounded by the tools that had been used to remove it.

She took it in one hand and felt its almost insignificant weight, it’s almost inoffensive appearance, but she could still smell the dark magic coursing through it. After so long with the changelings that was something she wouldn’t forget so soon.

FOUND A FAIR ERROR THERE.
that in a paragraph above say hoof and in the following hands, it confuses you when you read