Chapter One: Friendship Isn’t Enough
It was just another normal autumn day for Applejack as she lay underneath her beloved apple tree. She wondered why her best friend wasn’t with her. She was never late for Applejack. Sure, she didn’t have the best reputation for being on time. But when it came to Applejack, she was always, no matter what, always there sharpish, if not early.
So where was she?
“Ah reckon yer from around these parts?” a voice said from beside Applejack, harshly exaggerating her accent.
“Well there you are,” Applejack said. “Where the hay have you been?” She stood, gazing at the cyan Pegasus who lay under the tree next to her. She would have noticed if her eyes had been open.
“I was doing what I do best,” the pony said.
Applejack raised an eyebrow. “Sleeping?” she joked.
The pony scoffed. “Good one, AJ!”
Applejack joined her laughter.
Applejack’s best friend, the Pegasus, whose name was Rainbow Dash, was definitely classified as a tomboy. She loved jokes, adventure, pranks, flying (from which she hoped to make it into the elite flying team, the Wonderbolts), and sleeping. Her coat was cyan, and her mane and tail were rainbow. She was the fastest young flier in all of Equestria, thus promoting her name, Rainbow Dash.
“No,” Rainbow Dash finally said once they finished laughing. “I was practicing my signature moves for the Wonderbolts.” She grinned, spreading her wings after standing, puffing out her chest.
“Well, ah think that’s just dandy, sugarcube,” Applejack replied. She sat down against the tree. “So, what are yer plans for today?”
Rainbow Dash thought. “Actually, I don’t really have any.”
This somewhat disappointed Applejack. Neither of them had anything planned. Maybe Applejack would finally get the chance to –
“Hey, AJ,” Rainbow Dash said, bringing Applejack back into reality.
Applejack shook the fantasy out of her mind. “Yes, sugarcube?”
“We’re friends, right?” Rainbow asked.
“Rainbow, what kinda question is that? Yer mah best friend,” Applejack replied.
Rainbow nodded. “And you know I wouldn’t do anything to ruin that, right?”
A trace of a blush danced on Applejack’s face. “Ah-ah know. Thank you,” she said quietly.
Rainbow wondered why Applejack was acting so odd.
A moment of silence.
An idea hit Applejack like a baseball bat.
“Ah wanna show ya something,” Applejack said. They both stood, and Rainbow Dash followed Applejack as she led her through the woods.
Little did Rainbow know that Applejack would do the one thing she least expected.
Author's Note: I know this chapter isn't very long, but bear with me. Most of the chapters are very short, I must warn you. I like constructive critisism, so please comment!
Disclaimer: I don't own My Little Pony. Hell, I don't even have any of the action figures.
Whatever.
All the elements of a really good ship fic are here:
1) You seem to have a at least a grasp on grammar and proper structure.
2) I can't really gauge your descriptive abilities, but being that this chapter is so short, I feel that they could use a bit of work. Really, I just have a hard time taking anything seriously that's under a thousand words at least. That's a shame because I can tell that you have the potential to go into some really awesome detail ("A trace of a blush danced on Applejack’s face" is a good example: very elegant yet simple).
3) I'm saying this for anything you write in the future: you DO NOT need to include descriptions about any canon characters. This is a fan fiction, as in it's for a fan community. If this were a normal story where you created you're own characters, of course vivid description would be needed. However, you can assume that anyone reading this already knows the appearance and general personality is of the mane cast. TD;DR -- You don't need to tell us what we already know.
4) Like I said, you have all the elements of a good ship fic here, now all that is required is for you to put in the time and dedication necessary to make it great.