So glad to see a sequel. Love your way of telling stories. Keep it up!

I’m sorry it took so long to work up to commenting on this, but I thought I’d get time to sit and do a proper read through since I skim read the first time and that didn’t happen ‘til now.
First off, I do like this story. While I think it has a few pacing notes that you can learn from, such as revealing what happened to Moxie, the bar and a few other things very quickly, these can be very easily worked on in future stories. If you think there’s a plot point you want to say, hold onto it until it aches if you don’t. Hint but don’t tell until the last possible second.
What I love about this chapter is it isn’t ‘hi,’ ‘hi,’ sex. Not that I expect that from your writing, but there’s other authors who do. The other thing I like is the nuances; it’s not just a meal, it’s a meal he got from his family’s own recipe. They don’t just walk down a street, they follow a street covered in twinkling lights and tinsel. It doesn’t tell the story but it does paint the scene for you, tells you who these characters really are. I love that. More of that, definitely.
Lastly for this chapter, I personally wanna know where Tempest has been, what she’s done, who she met. He wasn’t there to help her bring Sparkler into the world, so who was? Maybe Sparkler is a clue. Maybe she did want to come home sooner but she was trapped... I wanna know. :3
Onwards and upwards
All good things
Dusky

Loved the first story, happy you did a sequel. However, are you going to explain in future stories how the reader character knocked Tempest up? Was there magic involved? I have a feeling the only way for a human and a pony to conceive a foal would be with some kind of intervention, because they're probably not genetically compatible.