Great subtle mind control story. Well, subtle for the character, anyway. The source of the hypnotic trigger was a bit vague, and it's not write clear what the plan was beyond acquiring ponies for... Something (changeling?). I also missed if the telepathic link actually got used, or was just in the contract. The characterization was good and I liked the slower pacing.
I’m glad that you enjoyed the slightly more subtle elements of the story, especially regarding the mind control. I’m always happy to hear when somebody enjoys my work, and I appreciate the comments about some parts being a little vague. My hope is that the epilogue will answer a few of those questions and may provide a few more to be answered in later stories down the line. Thanks again for your feedback!
Great subtle mind control story. Well, subtle for the character, anyway. The source of the hypnotic trigger was a bit vague, and it's not write clear what the plan was beyond acquiring ponies for... Something (changeling?). I also missed if the telepathic link actually got used, or was just in the contract. The characterization was good and I liked the slower pacing.
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I’m glad that you enjoyed the slightly more subtle elements of the story, especially regarding the mind control. I’m always happy to hear when somebody enjoys my work, and I appreciate the comments about some parts being a little vague. My hope is that the epilogue will answer a few of those questions and may provide a few more to be answered in later stories down the line. Thanks again for your feedback!