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This reminds me of my first story. That's not a good thing.
Full of cliches, pacing is way too fast, plot is ridiculously contrived, (how did his house and garage suddenly end up in Ponyville?) grammar is awful, and the MC is the Gariest of Gary Stu's, making him completely unrelatable. I'm still not entirely convinced this isn't a trollfic. I usually like humans taking vehicles to Equestria, if they're done well. This is not, which is why it's so disappointing to read.
I suggest you find a good editor, and try and get in the habit of reading more highly rated stories. That's the quickest way to become a better writer.
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Ok! i assure you this isnt a trollfic. Also thanks for the feedback. i will work on it in the future
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also how he ened up there will be explained. I had it planned before you left this comment