My God! This is a masterpiece! The role swap, the articulate and varied words. The detailed discriptions and beautifully simple plot. How you never refer to their bits profanely! But, most of all, the passion and romance expressed. Sure the sheer amount of sex is fantasy, but it's beautiful!
It achieves what all stories strive to, to give an entertaining experience that can be felt. Made me happy in my pants and heart. Seriously good, even with a few grammar spoofs, they actually made me feel better so I didn't get depressed about how this quality utterly crushes my work.
Damn good work! You've made us all proud. You've reminded me that I really need to put effort into my own writting, instead of letting it whither as I fade into and out of the sadness and the void. You've rekindled something that was dying in me, so yeah, I'm raving.
8942035 Well thanks! I really appreciate your thoughts on this! I write erotica professionally (under a pseudonym) so I like to think I do something moderately well. There's a balance you have to strike between the sexy times itself, and the interaction between the characters and setting. Too much of one thing and not the others, then it all falls apart spectacularly. I'm happy you think I succeeded in that regard.
I did like the emotional connections between the characters, though I swear this gives me vibes of an older fic "Spookshow Baby" I think? Though I think this ends happier and is more cohesive of a story.
A good read, and quite unique on some of the clop scenes, words and descriptors used, I will have to use this story as a reference if I ever write clop.
9043364 Hey! Thanks for stopping by! I haven't heard of Spookshow Baby, but anything with Trixie is good in my books! I'll see if I can locate it.
Also glad you enjoyed the clop. I put a lot of effort into erotica (more than my family thinks I should *lol*) and I like to think it's something I do relatively well. Lesbian erotica, at least. I can't write hetero to save my life! Feel free to use any or all of this as a reference for future sexy times!
Ha the titles are lyrics!
(Is easily amused)
My God! This is a masterpiece! The role swap, the articulate and varied words. The detailed discriptions and beautifully simple plot. How you never refer to their bits profanely! But, most of all, the passion and romance expressed. Sure the sheer amount of sex is fantasy, but it's beautiful!
It achieves what all stories strive to, to give an entertaining experience that can be felt. Made me happy in my pants and heart. Seriously good, even with a few grammar spoofs, they actually made me feel better so I didn't get depressed about how this quality utterly crushes my work.
Damn good work! You've made us all proud. You've reminded me that I really need to put effort into my own writting, instead of letting it whither as I fade into and out of the sadness and the void. You've rekindled something that was dying in me, so yeah, I'm raving.
Keep living the dream, whatever that is. - L.P.
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Glad you picked that up. I'm easily amused, too
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Well thanks! I really appreciate your thoughts on this! I write erotica professionally (under a pseudonym) so I like to think I do something moderately well. There's a balance you have to strike between the sexy times itself, and the interaction between the characters and setting. Too much of one thing and not the others, then it all falls apart spectacularly. I'm happy you think I succeeded in that regard.
Thanks again!
That was some beautifully written clop.
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Ayyy thanks a bunch!
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If it’s not obvious, Bette Midler is like my personal hero. Thanks!!!
I did like the emotional connections between the characters, though I swear this gives me vibes of an older fic "Spookshow Baby" I think? Though I think this ends happier and is more cohesive of a story.
A good read, and quite unique on some of the clop scenes, words and descriptors used, I will have to use this story as a reference if I ever write clop.
9043364
Hey! Thanks for stopping by! I haven't heard of Spookshow Baby, but anything with Trixie is good in my books! I'll see if I can locate it.
Also glad you enjoyed the clop. I put a lot of effort into erotica (more than my family thinks I should *lol*) and I like to think it's something I do relatively well. Lesbian erotica, at least. I can't write hetero to save my life! Feel free to use any or all of this as a reference for future sexy times!
Cheers!
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Sadly Spookshow Baby no longer exists, but the sequel does.
So they both waited 10 years to have sex again with eachother.
How romantic!