End of Prologue

A user said to me when I was writing a story once that this wasn't relevant, however, this is great so far. The same goes for when you wrote End of Chapter 1.

This was a heist worthy of Payday 2 and GTA! Holy shit, this was awesome!

wait what they shot an unarmed perp and he's getting a promotion

“I know that this is her castle.” Twilight answered with a hint of anger at her tone. “I also know that their security measures are obsolete. Hell, I bet an army of bugs will be able to tear this place down if it had the chance.”

Wow, the absolute subtlety here XD

Twilight laid unconscious on the ground as Night Light cuffed her. He then carried her gently towards his car. It took him a lot of effort to hold back his tears but in the end he wasn’t able to stop it. He sat on the driver seat as he sobbed like a little foal for two whole minutes. He spent the past eight years frantically searching for her, hoping that he will find his beloved daughter only to curse the day he was reunited with her.

Of course, the female character gets taken out in one hit(You will burn in hell for all eternity for filling the world with this cliche Hollywood.). If I can still stand after crashing my four wheeler into a tree and not black out at at`least 40 mph, then their is no reason twilight blacks out after one bloody hit. And I swear, if Twilight gets together with Flash Sentry or BlueBlood, I`m jumping off Mt. Everest. Doesn`t matter how much character they may have in the story. If you start as a piece of cardboard just to fill in a LOVE interest for Twilight, or a arrogant rich bastard. Then you shall forever be hated