8634895 I understand, some parts I feel like weren't dwelved in deeply enough, but in the next few chapters I hope to touch base on a few of the things, thank you :)
Well, as this is only first chapter I must say it is rather well paced. There are no jarring grammatical errors and so far story is going as smoothly as can be expected: Guy in unnatural storm gets teleported with entire dorm on unknown territories without anyone else. Protagonist seems to posses analytical mindset without any overblown traits and author has managed to turn his past into a mystery of sorts(I am assuming that the grandfather who was only tall person in entire family was also previous owner of the macguffin device)
All in all, liked, put on tracking list, wants moar.
8634954 truth be told, it's actually his great-grandfather, but I'm trying to take a bit of my own viewpoints for it honestly. My grandparents raised me, so to me they're my parents, and my great grandparents were my g-parents. But I'll make sure to clear that up in future chapters, thank you :)
8635282 Aww fudge I do? Sorry, I created all this super late last night, battling a cold atm as well so I apologize. I just did not want to use any generic or pre-made artwork, as I did not wish to steal peoples work to use for my own stuff.
......... what the fuck was that?????
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Hey thank you for reading, did you mean that in a good or bad way though? XD
Is good but I got lost fast. Maybe more episode will make me see clear
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I understand, some parts I feel like weren't dwelved in deeply enough, but in the next few chapters I hope to touch base on a few of the things, thank you :)
Yeah, it's a good read so far. Keep up the good work!
Well, as this is only first chapter I must say it is rather well paced. There are no jarring grammatical errors and so far story is going as smoothly as can be expected:
Guy in unnatural storm gets teleported with entire dorm on unknown territories without anyone else.
Protagonist seems to posses analytical mindset without any overblown traits and author has managed to turn his past into a mystery of sorts(I am assuming that the grandfather who was only tall person in entire family was also previous owner of the macguffin device)
All in all, liked, put on tracking list, wants moar.
8634954
truth be told, it's actually his great-grandfather, but I'm trying to take a bit of my own viewpoints for it honestly. My grandparents raised me, so to me they're my parents, and my great grandparents were my g-parents. But I'll make sure to clear that up in future chapters, thank you :)
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Thank you for the comment, I appreciate it :)
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No problem Doc.
I don't mind that you did the picture in Paint but you do realize you have the mini circles in the wrong spots right?
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Aww fudge I do? Sorry, I created all this super late last night, battling a cold atm as well so I apologize. I just did not want to use any generic or pre-made artwork, as I did not wish to steal peoples work to use for my own stuff.