Discord never stopped looking for his wife, Fluttershy: who disappeared after she went to an important conference in Baltimare...nearly two years ago....
Your chapters are definitely too short, but I used to do that too. Start striving for a bit more words in each and you'll grow as a writer. Things like poetry tend to work well with short chapters, but you aren't writing poetry.
The issues from the previous chapters still still are present, and are only becoming more obvious as your story goes on. I haven't downvoted this, but a lot of other people have.
You picked a sensitive and complex issue and handled it very poorly... unless you wanna go back to the development stage with this one, your story will not be received well. Your introduction of the perpetrator, Star Struck and further attempts to handle PTSD are all very amateur. Please consider doing research.
Your chapters are definitely too short, but I used to do that too. Start striving for a bit more words in each and you'll grow as a writer. Things like poetry tend to work well with short chapters, but you aren't writing poetry.
The issues from the previous chapters still still are present, and are only becoming more obvious as your story goes on. I haven't downvoted this, but a lot of other people have.
You picked a sensitive and complex issue and handled it very poorly... unless you wanna go back to the development stage with this one, your story will not be received well. Your introduction of the perpetrator, Star Struck and further attempts to handle PTSD are all very amateur. Please consider doing research.
Deleting comments is also not a good sign.