Before I even start reading I would like to tell you it's kind of off putting seeing that none of the chapters' names have a single capital letter and all are below a thousand words. It doesn't look promising.

Edit: After reading I'd say it wasn't as bad as I expected but you definitely combine the chapters to make fewer but longer chapters.

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I gave it a read, and while the first few chapters are written pretty well, the last couple of chapters could have used a little more polishing. Personally, I would have kept this as one big chapter, or maybe two tops.

To the author: Definitely not bad for your first story! When I saw that picture yesterday, I figured someone was going to write a story about it, and lo and behold, here it is! I thought it was pretty funny.

I am looking forward to more, and longer chapters! This is cute!

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Adorable and fast-paced. It's like a comic that just keeps rolling along in as playful way as it can with each section you post.

I really like the banter between Sunburst and Flurry. It makes the whole scenario quite silly over being just a perceivable fetish work. Plot and playfulness can certainly make a big difference when reading a padded pony story.

cool and good

Not bad but there is room for improvement. One thing you should add is how Flurry is thinking about the situation. Not just about her diaper but the tour in general and what they are talking about.

Not bad but there is room for improvement. One thing you should add is how Flurry is thinking about the situation. Not just about her diaper but the tour in general and what they are talking about.

well Flurry heart, sure seems to like the nursery