Episode 1: Gutterflower
Blossom’s Bizarre Adventure
Canterlot High, a humble school in the town of Canterlot, the school year had started and many new students were going there for the first time, along with older students going in for another year of classes. Among the new students, there was a shy, young girl named Loving Blossom, a girl with a power only she knew about. As she approached the doors to the school, she stopped to take a deep breath, but she was accidentally pushed to the ground by another girl, one with blue skin and rainbow hair.
“Shoot! Sorry there!” The girl stopped and apologized to Blossom before continuing to run into the school, Loving got back on her feet, picked up her glasses and got any dust off of her shirt and pants before stepping inside and exploring the school, she secured herself a locker and headed to a meeting at the school’s gymnasium. There, the principal, Celestia, welcomed the new students to the school and thanked the others for staying and studying there, after it was over, everyone got their schedules and headed to their classrooms.
Loving’s classroom wasn’t very lively until the teacher entered to give her class, beside Blossom, to her right, sat a gray and purple girl in glasses and a school girl uniform, while to her left was a punk-looking girl with long, green hair. She sat through all the classes for that day, went out for lunch at the proper time, did everything to not seem too special, and it seemed like she’d have an average day, or even year, until she met a special girl. She had wavy red and yellow hair and wore a black jacket over a pink shirt with a sun symbol on it, Blossom bumped into her from the back as she talked to the rainbow-haired girl that knocked her over earlier that day, the girl in the black jacket turned around and greeted Loving cheerfully.
“Hey there,” She said.
“Umm…” Blossom froze in place, unable to think of a reply, so she went with the most basic thing in her head, “Hi!” She said with a closed smile.
“I’m sorry for just standing here,” She mentioned, “But really, you should’ve watched where you were going as well, new kid,” She said.
“I know, I’m so sorry…” Blossom felt intimidated for no good reason and returned to her meek demeanor from before. The punk girl from Loving’s classroom walked up to them and began talking.
“Hey Sunset,” She said in a sarcastic tone.
“Ugh, hi Chrissy” Sunset replied, seemingly annoyed at having to talk to the green-haired girl.
“That’s Chrysalis to you, and what are you doing chatting with little miss quiet over there?” Chrysalis taunted them, causing Blossom to look down at the floor.
“Oh, cut it out, she’s new here,” Sunset said, “Don’t you dare come at me with any ‘I wasn’t a little twerp when I came in’ stuff, Ms. Still A Freshman,” She added, making her rainbow-haired friend react to the insult with a somewhat quiet ‘Oooh!’
“Hmph,” Chrysalis grunted, “Make fun of me all you want, demon girl, you’re not in any position to trash talk someone who may as well rule this stupid school,” She insulted Sunset right back.
Seeing that Sunset was somewhat shocked due to what Chrysalis said, Blossom mustered the courage in her to go up to the self-entitled punk girl and push her from behind.
“So much for being so quiet, looks like you’ve got plenty of guts, don’t you?” Chrysalis said, Blossom acted scared for a moment, but soon tried to seem intimidating, as much as it wasn’t working. Chrysalis threw a punch and Blossom couldn’t dodge it, she got hit right on her belly, making her almost lose her balance, but she managed to keep herself up and use her secret ability. She outstretched her arm and it seemingly began to dissolve into vines, which ensnared Chrysalis, keeping her from attacking again.
“Gutterflower, show her how to really hit hard,” A ghostly, flower-like apparition formed behind Blossom, punching Chrysalis away, in the same spot Blossom was hit in. A teacher rushed in, and Blossom returned as much as she could to normal, the students who watched that fight unfold were too shocked and confused to say anything, the teacher simply saw Chrysalis in a broken locker and that told her enough, a fight definitely happened there and she, not to the teacher’s surprise, was involved in it. The teacher helped Chrysalis get up and took her to the nurse’s office.
“Oh my…” Sunset whispered, “Rainbow, I think we found another one,” She turned to her blue-skinned friend. After that bizarre incident, all the students went home, but on the way out, Blossom was met by the two girls she met at the corridor, who properly introduced themselves that time.
“Hey, flower girl!” Rainbow got Blossom’s attention, “I’m Rainbow Dash, sorry for not saying anything like that earlier, heh,” She chuckled.
“Yeah, and I’m Sunset Shimmer,” Sunset introduced herself.
“Oh, what do you two want?”
“We saw what happened back there, when you punched Chrissy away like that,” Rainbow said.
“Oh, I’m sorry, that must’ve been pretty weird,” Blossom apologized, “I don’t usually use Gutterflower for stuff like that, I mainly just take care of my plants and wha- Wait, you saw her?!”
“Yeah, we did see ‘Gutterflower’, it’s a long story,” Sunset claimed.
“A long story that you’ll have to save for tomorrow, my bus is coming up,” Blossom nonchalantly derailed the conversation as she went to the bus stop and headed into the bus to go home.
“So, new Stand user in town, eh?” Rainbow Dash asked.
“It would seem so,” Shimmer said, “we need to know more about this girl and her powers,” She asserted.
At the nurse’s office, Chrysalis was walking out through the doors, clutching her belly from the pain she still felt, she headed to her locker to grab her stuff and leave, on the way out, there was nobody else around the school, she was all alone as she walked to her home, but down the street, she met an odd man in a suit and tie with combed back, golden hair.
“What’s wrong, lady?” The man asked, “You look a bit down,” He added.
Chrysalis hesitated in talking to a stranger but she eventually told him what happened, “I got my butt kicked at school by some newbie brat,” She said, in an angry tone.
“Well, that’s sad, isn’t it?” The man replied as they continued to walk alongside each other.
“Yeah, I totally could’ve ended that kid if I wanted to, but she punched me into a locker,” Chrysalis continued to be angry, “But you can’t do anything to help me, so why are you interested at all?”
“What if I could help?” The man questioned her, “This ‘brat’ doesn’t sound like a big deal of a person,” He joked.
“If you could, what would you do?” Chrysalis asked, the man simply reached into the bag he carried and pulled out an object, a golden arrow head, similar in shape to the spades symbol in a deck of cards, “What? Am I supposed to cut her up with this thing?” She was visibly confused.
“Well, you’ll figure it out soon, in the mean time, I have better things to do than chit chat with a high school student, goodbye,” The man said as he picked up his pace to, presumably, get home in time.
“Wait! I don’t even know your name!” Chrysalis shouted towards him after examining the arrow a bit more, but she got no response, the man simply continued on his way, leaving Chrysalis confused and with a new thing to play with.
To Be Continued…
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I'm very interested in this story, Stands are an excellent way to make a fight unique, and I'm always excited when they show up.
However, there are some problems with this chapter, the big one is pacing. In Blossom's introductory paragraph, she was established as a bit of a wallflower. Not 500 words later she's starting a fight. A character changing their demeanor when provoked isn't a bad thing, but when a character has a 'OOC' moment right after that 'C' was established can make it difficult for the reader to find either believable. You need to give the characters a little room to breathe.
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Yeah, I see where you're coming from, for some reason i thought that Chrysalis starting the fight out of nowhere would've been "weird" or something, even though I wrote her as the bully and that's the kind of stuff she would do.
I used to think that I wasn't good with writing preexisting characters, apparently what I'm bad at is writing a good OC that doesn't seem like a dumb mary sue or something.
I guess the excuse could be that she just wanted to be nice because neither her or Sunset liked what Chrysalis said, to each their own reason, but that's probably as flimsy as what actually came out on the chapter, which was vague and, as you said, just kinda out of character.
Anyways, I'm writing chapter 2, where the first Stand battle starts, let's hope I don't mess up horribly again and Blossom just becomes yet another different character, heheh.
EDIT: I'm surprised you didn't mention the last scene with Chrysalis meeting the guy who is totally not the main villain feeling like filler or padding, because it really just is, I couldn't think of how else to end it and I wanted to make sure I hit the 1000 word quota.
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I actually didn't notice that at all.
This would be more interesting if she had a hair-trigger (pun not intended) like josuke, as well as previous knowledge of what a stand is