I think you've got some potential as a writer, but there are definitely some issues you have to work through first. Right now, I'd advise you work on your grammar. I don't know what you write in, but if it has a spellcheck, you should definitely pay attention to it. Every time you see a mistake, go back and fix it. That's the only way you'll learn to stop making them. The second best thing you can do to improve your writing after practicing is to read as much as you can. And not just pony fics, either. Go out and read some real books by published authors. It'll help you figure out how to make your writing flow better. Once you've improved your writing generally, then you can worry about how to write good clop.

You need to work on some grammar issues and also the fact that after every punctiuation sign you need to leave space if you don't want to do that by yourself use Microsoft word it can resolve this kind of mistakes.

well sorry guys,I dont have any form of spell check and Im the only one in my family who can speak english.
Im doing my best,bear with me while I try to learn more. I have figured out how to use BOLD and ITALICS. I do also have a fanfiction profile with 23+stories but this is just a whole new thing.

>>ru771ancoldnexus

Could you please tell me how to do Bolds and Italics on a story. Please!!!!!!!!!

Also Good story, but the grammer could be better. I am waiting eagerly for the next Chapter

>>DestinedBrony

Yes my grammer sucks big time,I believe you put it into the brackets.

So <Itlaics Bla bla bla bla bla Italics>