Mother of God... Dat wall of text. Use the bloody enter key mate, it's you friend, not your enemy. It makes it a lot easier for the reader. Walls of text like these are rather intimidating, and it would be really pity if you scared someone away, because the story is pretty good.
912179 Ah, I see what you mean now that I look again. At the moment I can only access the 'net through my phone--and editing on my phone is darn-near impossible. The next time I have non-phone 'net I'll thow in more spacing. Thanks for pointing it out!
EDIT: I've gone back and tweaked the spacing; hopefully it's easier on the eyes. I made the scene breaks more visible too, to make it easier to read in multiple sittings. Longchap is long, and all that.
916945 Yeah, since chapters 1 and 2 are roughly paralleling the miniseries they're going to be pretty big. Once past that I'm hoping to do shorter chapters, up until the finale.
Battlestar galactica and Mlp? I must say, my interests have been piqued.
Mother of God... Dat wall of text. Use the bloody enter key mate, it's you friend, not your enemy. It makes it a lot easier for the reader. Walls of text like these are rather intimidating, and it would be really pity if you scared someone away, because the story is pretty good.
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Aw, thanks!
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I hope you end up pleased.
912179
Ah, I see what you mean now that I look again. At the moment I can only access the 'net through my phone--and editing on my phone is darn-near impossible. The next time I have non-phone 'net I'll thow in more spacing. Thanks for pointing it out!
EDIT:
I've gone back and tweaked the spacing; hopefully it's easier on the eyes. I made the scene breaks more visible too, to make it easier to read in multiple sittings. Longchap is long, and all that.
Geez this was a long chapter.
916945
Yeah, since chapters 1 and 2 are roughly paralleling the miniseries they're going to be pretty big. Once past that I'm hoping to do shorter chapters, up until the finale.
Holy god, you just earned yourself a FAV, Battlestar Galactica (one of my fav shows) and ponies?!?! I LOVE IT!
9/25/12
Just making an editing run; nothing much to see. Figured I'd freshen her up before I put down that next chapter.
May need another edit run in a week or so, too.
*Paused reading*
Just two words. And amazingly/obviously enough, that's all you need.