9103413 Oh—yeah I guess it just didn't feel crucial to the plot. I want the story to be a drama first and foremost, and although I certainly have no aversions to writing an explicit sex scene, I don't want readers to get the wrong idea about what this story is—and, perhaps more importantly—what it isn't.
I don't know, I wish I had more of an explanation for you. Generally, it's just what 'feels right' to me that dictates the writing, for better or for worse. And I suppose I felt a detailed sex scene between these two characters sort of betrayed the innocent, almost juvenile optimism that they've shared. This is especially contrasted against some of the other cast (most notably Cave and Moon Dust), who seem to only delve deeper into the worst this realm has to offer.
In any case, thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate all feedback.
So far, this story is...happening? The prose is decent, but I feel like it's meandering a lot and it hasn't really moved anywhere yet. Outside of Councilor Peach, who was here and gone in a flash, the story hasn't really done much yet. There needs to be some fast-paced moments to break up the slower pace of the rest of the story.
9433180 In a way, I feel like Resurgence is a response to my earlier works. I've spoken briefly about this earlier in the comments, but basically, the two 'big' stories that I've written before this were (in my opinion) too obsessed with surprising / shocking the reader. And like I also spoke about earlier down in the comments, this may have led me to oversteering in the opposite direction for Resurgence.
At its heart, I want the book to be about a diverse group of characters who are affected by the shocking news in a wide manner of ways. Surge—which this story is a rewrite of—personally felt more like a railroad that shot Twilight through a handful of insane, hardly believable 'twists'. This led me to two primary objectives with Resurgence: one, to shift the focus onto a full cast of characters, instead of one that bumps into others when it's convenient for her development. And two, to make these characters feel like they have lives outside of the pages. I want Resurgence to feel more grounded, I want it to feel like not everything means something—if that makes any sense.
Now having said that, I have delayed for way too long on the next chapter. The book should practically be finished by now. I have roughly 6,000 of the next chapter written, and if it's any condolence, I think it'll be a pretty significant turning point for several characters. I'll try my best to get the aptly named 'Maelstrom' out in the next couple of weeks, and I look forward to getting your perspective on it.
I'm guessing they kissed and fell asleep in the bed soon after?
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Well they were certainly in a bed, but I don't know if there was much sleeping going on, am I right? Ayyyyy
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Why didn't you put in a lemon between Twilight and Lyra in the chapter then?
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A what?
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A scene in a story that involves intercourse between characters.
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Oh—yeah I guess it just didn't feel crucial to the plot. I want the story to be a drama first and foremost, and although I certainly have no aversions to writing an explicit sex scene, I don't want readers to get the wrong idea about what this story is—and, perhaps more importantly—what it isn't.
I don't know, I wish I had more of an explanation for you. Generally, it's just what 'feels right' to me that dictates the writing, for better or for worse. And I suppose I felt a detailed sex scene between these two characters sort of betrayed the innocent, almost juvenile optimism that they've shared. This is especially contrasted against some of the other cast (most notably Cave and Moon Dust), who seem to only delve deeper into the worst this realm has to offer.
In any case, thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate all feedback.
So far, this story is...happening? The prose is decent, but I feel like it's meandering a lot and it hasn't really moved anywhere yet. Outside of Councilor Peach, who was here and gone in a flash, the story hasn't really done much yet. There needs to be some fast-paced moments to break up the slower pace of the rest of the story.
9433180
In a way, I feel like Resurgence is a response to my earlier works. I've spoken briefly about this earlier in the comments, but basically, the two 'big' stories that I've written before this were (in my opinion) too obsessed with surprising / shocking the reader. And like I also spoke about earlier down in the comments, this may have led me to oversteering in the opposite direction for Resurgence.
At its heart, I want the book to be about a diverse group of characters who are affected by the shocking news in a wide manner of ways. Surge—which this story is a rewrite of—personally felt more like a railroad that shot Twilight through a handful of insane, hardly believable 'twists'. This led me to two primary objectives with Resurgence: one, to shift the focus onto a full cast of characters, instead of one that bumps into others when it's convenient for her development. And two, to make these characters feel like they have lives outside of the pages. I want Resurgence to feel more grounded, I want it to feel like not everything means something—if that makes any sense.
Now having said that, I have delayed for way too long on the next chapter. The book should practically be finished by now. I have roughly 6,000 of the next chapter written, and if it's any condolence, I think it'll be a pretty significant turning point for several characters. I'll try my best to get the aptly named 'Maelstrom' out in the next couple of weeks, and I look forward to getting your perspective on it.