I have loved the work of Brush Stroke for a long time now. It is great to see a story about him finally.

That being said I can't help but feel that this chapter was a little rushed. It escalated a bit too quickly. :unsure sweetie:

The sexy writing could be toned down slightly because it is a bit too flagrant :twilight sheepish:

That being said: I can't wait to see more! :pinkie happy:

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I'm glad you like and thank for the criticize

Overall nice set up and better then most guys lemons. But you need more spice. Dont just say he increased his speed say what happens and how he dose it. steam from his nose, clenched ass, grit teeth as hw blows the mares body sending ripples across her body that seemed to only come back with equal force as her body clashed agents his. You know the stuff man get detailed and slather it in jalapenos

will it continue?

8270669 usually when that needs to be asked the answer is already clear....

but don't lose hope , just recently some good fics from years ago i subbed to got revived....

Lactation is top on the list fetish