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Visual presentation? Intriguing. Thanks for the story update!
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^_^ No problem
Yin is a good boi.
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The story is great in it's concept and heading, I really like where it's going. The characters are well crafted, motives hinted at, dispositions and ideals tentatively set or teased to the reader.
I'd say the pacing is terrible, but it fits Lexicon's temperament and thought processes, or so I've been given the impression anyway. That said, scenes seem to ebb and flow in how fast they move, giving off a vague disjointed feeling, almost feeling rushed, but not quite, the mind seems to fill in the blanks, but i can see it putting some people off i suppose.
tl;dr
Characters are likeable, relatable and generally feel unique.
Scene pacing and transition earlier on in the story feel a bit wonky, generally improves by chapter 4, but still could use some work*.
*Personally i find the vague disjointed pacing of the narration quite pleasing, lends immersion to the story, but as i noted above, this could put off some readers.
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Thank you ^_^
I can't quite nail down the slow pace.
I base a lot of the content on how I would approach a situation with certain information and points of view, so while the reasoning for each character remains diverse, I add a little too much of my own impatience into the plot making things move just a touch too fast.