i be mad too 5 years of rape man if i got out finally i would introduce atom bombs to the changlings so they can take over with guns and nukes the fucking works you know what everyone dies and then celestia the one getting raped not me
Even though I have read few stories like this I'm still interested where this will lead. Small spelling errors here and there. Really Dark thoughts: Really hope Elliot will just snack on Quick Silver every now and then. First he skins his cutie marks and makes potholders from them. Maybe flay his flesh over a long period of time and amputate leg or two. Of course Elliot will be cooking Quick Silvers parts in his presence and shows off his new potholders to Quick Silver.
Poor stallion, but he had it coming. Maybe ha can find some (male/female - doesn't matter) Changelings with an interest in stallions and invite him to have 'fun' with his prisoner...
Note: I don't know wether or not you already know about it, but there is already a quite popular OC with the name "Nyx". I don't want to say you should change yours, I just want to make sure you know about it.
When you're about to release a chapter, I highly suggest revising it or having someone revise and fix it for you.
I did say that I would offer some help with editing by the way and pretty sure you had someone else join you as well. Perhaps wait for the person who volunteered to actually look over the chapter before releasing it?
Anyways, awesome chappy.
But I didn't expect such a violent response from him in regards to him and the Changelings. Perhaps apprehension and caution but not really murderous intent.
Him running away is pretty accurate.
Eating him? That's a bit sick man, we humans aren't really much for eatin' things that can talk back to ya...
In fact, he should have immense disgust for that bastard, eating him should make him even gag a bit.
Though to be fair, his mental state isn't in the best place right now.
He used to be a fairly okay guy before all this, so he must've turned into an impulsive and very sadistic guy.
Yes! Fucking yes! I've been waiting for this shit for so long. Hurry the fuck up and post the next chapter! Make them suffer! This is..... Interesting.
I am not entirely sure how I feel about this story, and will tentatively keep track of it. I however can suggest to you a way to make your story better. I have noticed a couple of relatively simple spelling errors, if you were to perhaps run it through an auto checker you could improve that area of your story. One that I can suggest of the top of my head is called spellcheckplus.
Hope that my comment helps you to improve your story.
Alright I just started editing today. The first chapter will be finished in the near future! also if I screw up on my editing part pm or comment, because I tend to screw up. "Dammit private Pyle!"
It's spelled Queen not Qween, just so you know....
Cant wait to see what he does to his "food".
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It's late and I'm tired, so that's a tomorrow problem
I love stories where an evil Celestia gets her ass handed to her slowly and painfully.
It's spelled does not dose, a dose is an amount.
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Get back to work!
lovin it so far :3
i be mad too 5 years of rape man if i got out finally i would introduce atom bombs to the changlings so they can take over with guns and nukes the fucking works you know what everyone dies and then celestia the one getting raped not me
Honestly? I don't see the point in making them suffer.
Just kill them and be done with it, Why wait?
Even though I have read few stories like this I'm still interested where this will lead. Small spelling errors here and there.
Really Dark thoughts:
Really hope Elliot will just snack on Quick Silver every now and then. First he skins his cutie marks and makes potholders from them. Maybe flay his flesh over a long period of time and amputate leg or two. Of course Elliot will be cooking Quick Silvers parts in his presence and shows off his new potholders to Quick Silver.
At least Chryssie and lots of her children survived.
Gonna be awkward once he wakes up.
is that said like how moe says marge? oh-oh-oh it's Midg-ic!
Poor stallion, but he had it coming.
Maybe ha can find some (male/female - doesn't matter) Changelings with an interest in stallions and invite him to have 'fun' with his prisoner...
Note:
I don't know wether or not you already know about it, but there is already a quite popular OC with the name "Nyx". I don't want to say you should change yours, I just want to make sure you know about it.
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Nope just a typo
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Honestly didn't even know...lol
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Midian MAKE THAT A THING BECAUSE THAT'S FUCKING AWESOME
I have a suggestion for editing stories.
When you're about to release a chapter, I highly suggest revising it or having someone revise and fix it for you.
I did say that I would offer some help with editing by the way and pretty sure you had someone else join you as well. Perhaps wait for the person who volunteered to actually look over the chapter before releasing it?
Anyways, awesome chappy.
But I didn't expect such a violent response from him in regards to him and the Changelings. Perhaps apprehension and caution but not really murderous intent.
Him running away is pretty accurate.
Eating him? That's a bit sick man, we humans aren't really much for eatin' things that can talk back to ya...
In fact, he should have immense disgust for that bastard, eating him should make him even gag a bit.
Though to be fair, his mental state isn't in the best place right now.
He used to be a fairly okay guy before all this, so he must've turned into an impulsive and very sadistic guy.
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Hey thanks for the feedback and the advice.
Yes! Fucking yes! I've been waiting for this shit for so long. Hurry the fuck up and post the next chapter! Make them suffer!
This is..... Interesting.
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Maybe use a spell checker, and get an editor. Try lengthening the chapter by providing extra detail and setting
I am not entirely sure how I feel about this story, and will tentatively keep track of it.
I however can suggest to you a way to make your story better. I have noticed a couple of relatively simple spelling errors, if you were to perhaps run it through an auto checker you could improve that area of your story. One that I can suggest of the top of my head is called spellcheckplus.
Hope that my comment helps you to improve your story.
Alright I just started editing today. The first chapter will be finished in the near future!
also if I screw up on my editing part pm or comment, because I tend to screw up. "Dammit private Pyle!"
We need more updates
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Thanks.....I guess?
8233010 Horse meat looks like that!? It doesn't look any different than lamb!