A declaration of foresight
A black unicorn stallion sits at a table, old book in view, quill off to the side, for which the pony sub-consciously takes notes with. So used to studying is he that the act of taking notes has become a self-proclaimed background process. Good news for the stallion to which 2 massive lavender eyes were glued intently to himself, and only inches away, the very definition of distracting; so entranced were these eyes, you'd think the owner was expecting something very interesting to happen at a moment's notice.
But no, this violet unicorn in particular was just very annoying when it came to the quality of books.
In another attempt to make the eyes flinch, he enveloped the entire book with his magic before turning a page, as opposed to just the page itself, although unsuccessful, he did elicit a response.
"Can you please stop that?"
"I have no idea what you're talking about." he deadpans.
"I know what you're trying to do."
"Is that so?"
"You're trying to annoy me."
"I'm trying to give your eyes a reason for being the size of dinner plates, but alas, there is not, nor will there ever be, a reason for eyes to be the size of dinner plates."
"I'm being vigilant."
"You're being sarcastically vigilant, it's that kind of look that says 'yes, I'm listening'."
"I'm just making sure you don't destroy an important archived document."
"And you think that would take place within the breadth of a second?"
Silence.
"You think that if you don't look closely enough, you might miss it?"
More silence.
"I think you just want to know what I'm doing." The colt starts to copy down a complicated scroll marking into his notebook.
"I'm not interested in the slightest."
"Fine, I'll tell you. I've been trying to learn all there is about scroll spells, and by using, what else, a scroll, I've found that any information I don't have resides solely here, and in a small rural town library a day away by train."
"Wait a minute," She sits down, "why didn't you just go to the town first instead of the royal archives?"
"My reasons are threefold: one, there is only one spell pattern here that I don't know yet..." The mare becomes interested in what this is and slowly leans forward to look.
"...two, I'm planning on living there even when I'm done, and three, destiny!" he slams both books before putting his quill, inkwell and notebook into his ever-present saddlebags. This allows the mare to realize what he just said.
"Destiny?"
"Yes, destiny," He stands up from his chair, "I have an actual sixth sense that tells me when something important is about to happen, and it tells me to do things, and when I do them, good things happen. Sometimes, it even tells me things that I shouldn't know, depending on how important the event is. Now if you don't mind, I have a train to catch."
While in leaving, the mare takes one last note of his features. He has black fur, with deep blue eyes. His mane and tail is a dark blue, with cyan highlights that contrast against his entire body. His cutie mark is, unsurprisingly, a scroll and quill.
The mare's attention goes back to the book, she slowly approaches it, but before she can look in it, a story book is placed on top of it.
"By the way, my sixth sense tells me you need to read this."
"There is no such thing as destiny."
"Sure, sure... see you in Ponyville." The mare casts a confused stare at the stallion, who then winks before leaving.
Looking to the storybook, she did realize one thing, she hadn't read that one yet, and who's to say that he hadn't found a way to predict the future, perhaps he actually did read all there is to know about scrolls, she wouldn't know, she really wasn't that into scroll spells anyways.
Later, much to this mare's displeasure, she had found something, and had her assistant take a note to her mentor, a princess by the name of Celestia. She had a response written quite quickly.
"See, I knew she would want to take immediate action."
*ahem* "My dearest, most faithful student Twilight. You know that I value your diligence and that I trust you completely. But you simply must stop reading those dusty old books!"
"What?"
Did you hear about the origin of Zebrafrica? It was said that the ponies cared so much about standing out, that when a fire started, they were unable to put it out because of poor city planning, in fact, it was so catastrophic that the entire continent turned into sand. Some towns and cities are like that, trying their best to stand out. This is not one of those towns, but if it was, the residents didn't need to do anything differently. It was next to the mysterious everfree forest, which housed an old castle of arbitrary importance. It was here that Twilight and her dragon assistant were now headed in the back of a royal cart, driven by pegasi.
"My dear Twilight, there is more to a young pony's life than studying, so I'm sending you to supervise the preparations for the Summer Sun Celebration in this year's location: Ponyville. And, I have an even more essential task for you to complete: make some friends!"
"But, but... no... I... this is no time to make friends."
"So all that freaking out had nothing to do with him?"
"Spike."
"It's that pony from a week ago, the one that said 'see you in Ponyville'."
"There is no such thing as destiny!"
"Twilight, this seems like a pretty big coincidence."
Twilight sighs, Spike was right, not only did she find something in that book, but now she was being assigned to Ponyville, the very town that stallion had told her about. Who was this perplexing pony?
"At least you're getting assigned to a library, doesn't that make you happy?"
"Actually, yes, if that odd pony could find something of interest there, then I can too."
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At least he's not red and black.
7906653 I don't understand that reference.
7906719
He is referring to the OC cover art thing.
Many, many, many people make their OCs red and black because they think it looks cool, when in reality, eh.
is this a troll fic? Seventh element and pony creator cover say yes.
if not rethink your premise.
7906837 this fic was meant for silly antics, the seventh element thing is for convenience and the fact that he is powerful, but foolhardy.
Also Pony Creator looks bucking amazing.
Interesting. While others may think that is a cliched idea, I think that if you perhaps tweaked the description a little or would help you greatly. A tip, if I may. If you want to get more attention join groups and add your story to the revel ant folders. It's probably more effective than being in the new lists section on the front page.
As for the cover art. I'm not saying it's bad, but Pony OC creator has been used so much for less than deserving stories that its gained a nasty reputation. Go to google images and search 'MLP epic pony art' and you'll see what the greatest artists of the fandom has to offer.
Hope this helps you and I wish all the best on your story
7907000 thanks for the positive feedback and the suggestions, but if you don't mind telling me how to tweak the description to do justice to the content, that would be amazing.
I'll try finding groups to add it to, and I'll probably look for a commissioner to make a better cover, or try making one myself.
As a side note, if you find an appropriate group, don't be afraid to put this story in.
7907652
I just added your story to 2 groups, which can be seen if you scroll down on the far right. To find more groups you can go to here to search/browse for them. For the art, you don't necessarily have to commission anything. There are truckloads of high quality art already out there, and you don't even need the main character in the art. Maybe just the picture of a gloomy ponyville or something will suffice to get the interests of potential readers.
As for the description, I'm mostly talking about the short description you have. The 7th Element Bearer bit may be off putting to some. Maybe right a simple sentence describing what might happen in the story? Or the circumstances of the arrival of this new element bearer? Of course, you're the author so naturally all of these are just suggestions.
Have a nice one!
7907687 Group added and description changed, thank you for your rapid responses and continued support, I will continue to look for the perfect cover image.
7907728
No worries, I'm glad to help a budding author! I remember not too long ago, when I was in your position, that I could've used a lot of help concerning things like this.
Keep writing and never falter!