After confessing her feelings for her friend-with-benefits, Berry Punch finds that their relationship has changed. Things are still steamy and intimate, but was this change really for the better?
A few typos, but otherwise it's looking good. I liked the slice-of-life and witty banter.
Cute it hardly sexy.
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The fight instinct begins to fade in me as I order my heart to beat sower, my lungs to fill more easily.
Slower and I do believe that's a comma splice.
I love this series...
“Are you kidding?” I groan with a roll of my eyes. “This is definitely for my benefit. I’m just trying to be charming and shit.”“Well, I already think you’re charming. And shit. So relax.”
“Are you kidding?” I groan with a roll of my eyes. “This is definitely for my benefit. I’m just trying to be charming and shit.”
“Well, I already think you’re charming. And shit. So relax.”
A few typos, but otherwise it's looking good. I liked the slice-of-life and witty banter.
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Slower and I do believe that's a comma splice.
I love this series...