Twilight Sparkle and Shining Armor are sent to Ponyville to investigate a filly's disappearance. They soon find themselves entwined in a web of deceit and mystery in which every turn brings them closer to a terrible and ancient secret.
Sentence structure seems to suggest Big Mac is talking, so why is there a female pronoun?
As for Applejack... I know they're into child murder, but I cannot deny that her argument works as both a brilliant deconstruction of Twilight Sparkle's character, the idea of Celestia as a god, and the Judeo-Christian faith.
And also, I do have to ask, as someone who hasn't actually seen the original film, how much of the dialogue in this is just a thinly ponified version of the film dialogue? Because I just watched the original film's trailer, and recognized at least one line as being completely unchanged between film and fic ('contemptible little liars').
I see three Possible endings to this. Either you emulate the movie, or you'll make Twilight stay in ponyville sort of canon to the show.
Or, of cource, you make NMM return to prove celestia right and every heathen will BURN! BURN I TELL YOU! BURN! Ehrm... sorry. I love you story. Excellent writing! You will have a fav once it’s finished.
This was the best chapter yet. Twi and AJ's conversation was riveting.
Sentence structure seems to suggest Big Mac is talking, so why is there a female pronoun?
As for Applejack... I know they're into child murder, but I cannot deny that her argument works as both a brilliant deconstruction of Twilight Sparkle's character, the idea of Celestia as a god, and the Judeo-Christian faith.
And also, I do have to ask, as someone who hasn't actually seen the original film, how much of the dialogue in this is just a thinly ponified version of the film dialogue? Because I just watched the original film's trailer, and recognized at least one line as being completely unchanged between film and fic ('contemptible little liars').
7754197 90% of the dialogue is original. 5% is thinly ponified. 5% is straight quoted dialogue from the original film.
I see three Possible endings to this. Either you emulate the movie, or you'll make Twilight stay in ponyville sort of canon to the show.
Or, of cource, you make NMM return to prove celestia right and every heathen will BURN! BURN I TELL YOU! BURN! Ehrm... sorry. I love you story. Excellent writing! You will have a fav once it’s finished.