The royal wedding was salvaged and all seems well but Celestia's not happy with Chrysalis's aloof feelings to being tortured, the royal guard can't see what's going on but the best MILC in Equestria can
7634188 No actually that was on purpose. I ended that chapter there to give the reader a surprise at the end and so they won't feel winded after reading a great wall of china's worth of text and be burned out before getting to chapter two. BREVITY IS THE SOUL OF WIT!!! Even though that probably doesn't apply here.
7634457 unfortunately it didn't come across as a cliff hanger, it just felt jarring. Like I was on the phone talking to someone and the phone cut out right as they were speaking. Don't be afraid to hold onto a chapter.
"Hey-hey buddy you okay?" Jiffy tires' luck seemed to change as a rather busty mare came to his aid, but sure enough a bed came crashing on his face and fell on her killing them both
Hey, don't kill bystanders they are the one I mourning the most
7634188 No actually that was on purpose. I ended that chapter there to give the reader a surprise at the end and so they won't feel winded after reading a great wall of china's worth of text and be burned out before getting to chapter two. BREVITY IS THE SOUL OF WIT!!! Even though that probably doesn't apply here.
7634457 unfortunately it didn't come across as a cliff hanger, it just felt jarring. Like I was on the phone talking to someone and the phone cut out right as they were speaking. Don't be afraid to hold onto a chapter.
I would say "Jesus take the wheel.", but based on where this car is going, it probably didn't even have a wheel.
Hey, don't kill bystanders they are the one I mourning the most