we kind of just date for a while before we go into doin the horizontal tango.

That one is new to me haha

7613755 thank you for the compliment, may I ask what caught your interest with this story? And I do apologize for the lack of updates. I just got some shit going on that I need to deal with first.

7613844 well I personally I like that kind of story where someone is lost in a new world and they have to find out the how and where or when they are. It is always fun. And what is special in your story I have to say is the "colorful" language they have, if you know what I mean. I like the main characters Ash and Erik, the way they comunicate with each other really make my atach to them, like they are really true people that I can meet somewhere near my neighborhood, and that makes me to know what is going to happem with them. But I have to say, I didnt enjoy that much the 3th chapter, I think it want a little fast. I mean Celestia just find out about these humans and there home in the forest, then all of the sudden she know that they can't come back to home and the main characters are like "o well thats an inconvenience". I dont know, I just think that that kind of news should be more dramatic.and not only that, Celestia then offer them money for there family after, again all of the sudden, she know a way of send them back to there world. Sorry but that's what I think, but may be all that can be explain in latter chapters, I dont know, is bad to say things like that when the story is not even done yet.
And sorry for the long coment XP, i get a little carried away.

7614552 Yeah that third chapter was a little meh in my opinion, but iv'e gone back and re-read it plenty of times and I just cant seem to make it... "flow better"? all you need to know is Celestia has her motives and we just gotta see if our duo will fall into her plans.