My first fanfic so please be gentle but I would like some constructive criticism. I've been wanting to write a FoE fic for awhile now and I'm glad I finally did.

Approx 12,000 words on your first I have a good feeling about this

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Thanks! I already almost planned out how I'm going to write the next chapter and I have no idea how I'd make that short so it'll be a long one too

They say brevity is the soul of wit. While I don't doubt you mean well and obviously have much to share, division into easily digestible chunks is often the more desired action. Just as a general suggestions. It makes writing faster, neater, crisper and cuts down on the potential of turgid passages and purple prose.

756086 Shorter scenes? I can do that

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You're gonna go far, kid, as the saying goes.

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Very well written story (chapter)! No obvious grammatical errors that stand out and great work overall

Have yourself a Watch and a Fav

Oooh! Another FOE sidefic! I will read this, and I am sure it will be good. After all, I myself am writing one.

tl;dr I'll see to this later

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Your writing New Roam? I heard about that one from somewhere but I can't recall where. I think someone told me about it on deviantart.

I will wiat to see if this holds up to the literary greatness that is Fallout: Equestria

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Yes, I am. Hopefully it will be nearly as good as the original FOE, as I intend to make it pretty long. Good luck on your fic, as well.

Now, back to writing.

Hahah~! YES! You used Error Code, one of the names I suggested!
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whens the next chapter this was good?

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Yep I really started liking that name and it just stuck

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Thanks! Next chapter is about half way done

People always said I was good at coming up with names. Pretty much, since day one, I've always looked at my character, knew what I wanted them to do, but never had a name right on hand. But then, I've always been one to say:
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