Dragons, Orphans, and Rainbows.
Ch. 3 in progress more flash backs are in your future.
Excellent story. It pleases me. However, all dialogue is in a chunk. There are no indication of natural pauses. For example, "I'm here its alright I'm here" shouldve looked more like "I'm here, its alright, I'm here.
838062 Thank you for your input I will use this to increase the quality of the following chapters.
Ch. 3 in progress more flash backs are in your future.
Excellent story. It pleases me. However, all dialogue is in a chunk. There are no indication of natural pauses. For example, "I'm here its alright I'm here" shouldve looked more like "I'm here, its alright, I'm here.
838062 Thank you for your input I will use this to increase the quality of the following chapters.