With the return of the Crystal Empire to the frozen north, Crystal Princess Mi Amore Cadenza must use a new kind of diplomacy (sex!) to strike deals with foreign groups near and far. This is the story of how Cadance secured her country's future.
What a nice start! I had the same idea for a story a while back, much too busy to actually write it though :( Good to see someone taking up the charge!
Hmm, I wonder if Shining will be okay with his wife effectively cheating on him? I assume they have some kind of arrangement or Cadence wouldn't have just dived right in like that, right?
67041926704321 Oh, Shining is okay with it. Trust me, he's gonna get in on the diplomatic action in the very near future
6704516 For now, I have no plans to have any Yaks in the story. Wouldn't make sense seeing as they would just throw a fit and yell "this not yak sex!" over and over again while smashing anything they can find. Not a very good clopfic if you ask me.
6706819 Grrr.... How could I miss such a small detail!? Thanks for pointing that out!
6706912 Should be a spinoff series. Maybe if I run out of ideas for this I can start on a Shining Armor version. "Shining and the Defense of the Empire" or something like that. Hmm....
I also have some ideas for bonus chapters to go with each of the main chapters, but I'm not sure if I'll get to them any time soon. Any writers out there want to collaborate on an idea for a short side story to this?
Great chapter, you wrote Gilda perfectly. And this makes more sense than many fics where she would become the ruler of the griffons - she's not really the type to sit on her butt, however deliciously shapely and plump it is, and do paperwork.
I'm on Chapter 2 and so far so good. One thing that could have been better though, is that the justification for the sex does not quite match with the events. Since the justification is that griffons use it to show 'no hard feelings' after a fight and establish trust, there should have been some element of mistrust and uncertainty between the two sides. Maybe there should have been some sort of fight as well, not a regular violent one of course, but at least some dominance display or power play. One comes out dominant, and ruffled feathers are smoothed the traditional griffon way. Which is to say, the comment about 'one sided deal' should have preceded sex, the way it comes out now sound a lot more like a request to reciprocate the cunnilingus, and going back to actual negotiations after they've transitioned to seemingly post-deal sex breaks up the flow. Dominance playing a role would have given a better justification for why Gilda and not someone else, she certainly doesn't shine with negotiating talents here, but we know she can do yelling and shoving. Alternatively, since Gilda is the Friendly Griffon now, she could have been sent because she's good at making friends the sexy way, make that her negotiation angle. Speaking of, given the title and premise, this chapter should have been the one to establish Cadance as someone who uses sex in her negotiations, but instead she comes off as someone who just likes opportunistic sex with foreigners. Also, it would have been nice for Amethyst to be used to Cadance's negotiating habits, I just feel it's better for minor characters be also sexy and slutty instead of having them be shocked and put off by the antics of main characters, when it's not important to the plot. Perhaps Amethyst could even use similar tactics herself to mollify the ewe herders about the reschedule.
Ugh. First real chapter and it has to be lesbian, May we please get chapters tagged so those of us not into this can just skip them?
What a nice start! I had the same idea for a story a while back, much too busy to actually write it though :( Good to see someone taking up the charge!
Hmm, I wonder if Shining will be okay with his wife effectively cheating on him? I assume they have some kind of arrangement or Cadence wouldn't have just dived right in like that, right?
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I think it's called swinging. I'm sure Shining will get some from time to time like he always does because he's a handsome dork.
6703815 Surely you wouldn't want to skip over such a rich story containing amazing amounts of lore?
Just kidding, added chapter tags to the story description
Might read, but if she ends up with a Yak, I'm out.
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I believe Shining Armor does frequently go to the barracks to "raise morale" and teach the guards to "accept whatever life gives."
6704192 6704321 Oh, Shining is okay with it. Trust me, he's gonna get in on the diplomatic action in the very near future
6704516 For now, I have no plans to have any Yaks in the story. Wouldn't make sense seeing as they would just throw a fit and yell "this not yak sex!" over and over again while smashing anything they can find. Not a very good clopfic if you ask me.
6706819 Grrr.... How could I miss such a small detail!? Thanks for pointing that out!
6706912 Should be a spinoff series. Maybe if I run out of ideas for this I can start on a Shining Armor version. "Shining and the Defense of the Empire" or something like that. Hmm....
I also have some ideas for bonus chapters to go with each of the main chapters, but I'm not sure if I'll get to them any time soon. Any writers out there want to collaborate on an idea for a short side story to this?
Bet many Crystal hippogiffs were born in the future
I kinda wanna see thestrals in this. Like, the Alpha Thestral/Thestral King or whatever. Get dat bat dick!
6708943 Did you actually think about that comment?
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Yes. If Griffins settle in the Empire then interbreeding is inevitable.
Griffon tongue makes diplomacy easy.
Great chapter, you wrote Gilda perfectly. And this makes more sense than many fics where she would become the ruler of the griffons - she's not really the type to sit on her butt, however deliciously shapely and plump it is, and do paperwork.
I'm on Chapter 2 and so far so good. One thing that could have been better though, is that the justification for the sex does not quite match with the events. Since the justification is that griffons use it to show 'no hard feelings' after a fight and establish trust, there should have been some element of mistrust and uncertainty between the two sides. Maybe there should have been some sort of fight as well, not a regular violent one of course, but at least some dominance display or power play. One comes out dominant, and ruffled feathers are smoothed the traditional griffon way. Which is to say, the comment about 'one sided deal' should have preceded sex, the way it comes out now sound a lot more like a request to reciprocate the cunnilingus, and going back to actual negotiations after they've transitioned to seemingly post-deal sex breaks up the flow. Dominance playing a role would have given a better justification for why Gilda and not someone else, she certainly doesn't shine with negotiating talents here, but we know she can do yelling and shoving. Alternatively, since Gilda is the Friendly Griffon now, she could have been sent because she's good at making friends the sexy way, make that her negotiation angle. Speaking of, given the title and premise, this chapter should have been the one to establish Cadance as someone who uses sex in her negotiations, but instead she comes off as someone who just likes opportunistic sex with foreigners. Also, it would have been nice for Amethyst to be used to Cadance's negotiating habits, I just feel it's better for minor characters be also sexy and slutty instead of having them be shocked and put off by the antics of main characters, when it's not important to the plot. Perhaps Amethyst could even use similar tactics herself to mollify the ewe herders about the reschedule.
Shame on you for the GPS pun BTW.
Anyway, I'm overall enjoying this story so far.