"Thanks for deciding to show up." Dash said snarkily.
"I'm not that late. Besides, I have a reason for being late." Soarin said smugly. "That's more than I can say for-"
Dash interupted the stallion beneath her with a kiss. "I missed you." Dash said lifting her head back up.
"I missed you too. But could you please get off me? I kinda need to breathe." Soarin replied.
"Fine, fine." She said climbing off Soarin. "What next? Do you need food and water too?" Dash joked.
"Pfft. Whatever," Soarin scoffed. "Hey Flutters, it's good to see you."
"Yeah, it's good to see you too." Fluttershy said as Soarin pulled her in for a hug.
"So, what's up with you two?" he asked releasing Fluttershy.
"Oh my Celestia it was so awesome! You know the CMC I told you about back at Canterlot? Well they finally got their Cutie Marks, and they're awesome!" Rainbow said excitedly.
"Really? That's awesome! With what you told me about them, I thought they'd never get those marks."
"Honestly, I think everyone thought the same. Oh and me and Scoots entered in the sisterhooves social and utterly destroyed the competition!" Rainbow boasted. "I swear that kid is amazing."
"Awesome! Anything else?"
"Well nothing really. Anything else worth metioning I already told you about at Canterlot." Rainbow told her.
"Aren't you forgetting you're little outburst?" Fluttershy spoke up.
Rainbow covered Fluttershy's mouth with her hoof and quickly stated, "Oh you must be confused Fluttershy." Rainbow turned and gave Fluttershy an angry look. "Nothing else happened."
Fluttershy calmly removed Rainbow's hoof from her mouth and replied, "but wasn't there that whole issue with you trying to stop winter?"
"Wait what?" Soarin said in confusion.
"Sorry it seems that me and Flutters here have some talking to do." Rainbow pushed Fluttershy with her to a nearby room to talk. Rainbow had an embarrassed look on her face as she did so. "I'll be out in a minute." She said before closing the door.
Soarin, confused by the situation, just decided to see what the others were doing. Soarin wandered a bit and passed by Dash's parents and greeted them. Soarin then walked upstairs to see Blitz, still holding the little colt. "Hey Blitz how ya-" Soarin was immediately interrupted by Blitz shushing him. Soarin did as told and watched Blitz place Prism in the crib.
"Let's talk outside." Blitz mouthed. Soarin shook his head and exited the room with Blitz behind him.
"Just got him to sleep huh?" Soarin asked.
"Actually, he was asleep until you showed up. I finally got him back to sleep." Blitz said sighing.
"Whoops sorry. Guessing the single parent life isn't treatin' you well."
"No, not at all. You have no idea how hard it is to raise a foal on your own. Not to mention, his mother refuses to pay foal support so I have barely enough money to scrape by." Blitz said sadly. He looks back at the room he just left. "But, I just love Prism so much I can't part with him."
"You know you can ask for help. You've got your parents, you've got Dash, Flutters, and you've got me. So stop sulking about the baby and let's party! I haven't seen you in what a year? Let's go while Prism is still asleep." Soarin said attempting to pull Blitz off the ground.
"You'll really help me with Prism?"
"Why the hell wouldn't I? We've been friends since we were colts. Now, get up and let's celebrate Hearth's warming!" Soarin finally managed to pull the stallion off the ground. The two stallions started to walk down the stairs but Soarin, of all ponies stopped them. "Wait, there is something I wanted to tell you. I have a certain present for your sister and I want your advice."
"Shoot," Blitz said calmly. Soarin nodded and proceeded to take a small box out off his sadle bags. Blitzs recognized that type of box and knew instantly what Soarin intended to do. "You're going to propose to Dash?!" He said louder than expected.
"Shush!" Soarin said putting his hoof to his mouth. "Yes but don't be so loud. Well possibly, I don't know. Do you think it's time?"
Blitz gave Soarin a cynical look and a raised eyebrow. "Seriously? You've been secretly dating for 5 years now. We were worried you'd never end up doing it."
"Really?" Soarin asked. Blitz nodded. "Okay yeah whatever, going back to my original question, when should I do it? Should I do it today or tomorrow? What will make it more special?"
"Hmmm" Blitz rubbed his chin. "For now, keep it a secret. Meet back here after the race."
"Got it" Soarin nodded and with that, the two pegasi trotted down the stairs to enjoy Hearth's warming.
Yasss update
I like the dash has a brother with a kid
UPDATE NOW!
You MUST update soon!!
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6689527 I just did... Give me some time, the only part of the next chapter I have is the title.
6689165 Yeah I kinda like the idea of Rainbow Blitz being Dash's Brother and I wanted something original about him. Plus I have a story planned for Prism when I'm done with this one.
I like the story, but I'd like to point out a few errors.
Did Soarin just answer himself, or did he answer for Fluttershy because she took too long to answer? If the latter is the case, it's not very clear.
Suggestion:
can't
Also, something I noticed was your punctuation after dialogue. For example:
In this quote, along with much of your other dialogue, you ended the dialogue with a period, followed by the dialogue tag. When the quote and dialogue tag are in the same sentence, they are always separated by a comma, not a period.
Revision:
Note the comma.
When a quote ends with a question or exclamation mark, don't capitalize the dialogue tag if it's a pronoun. Ex:
Should be:
One more thing, when a dialogue tag is followed by an action in the same sentence, a comma should separate the tag and action.
Ex: "Blah blah blah," he said, doing a generic action.
Sorry for such a long comment, but I hope you take it into consideration. Again, I'm enjoying the content and plot of the story.
6690693 No this is all stuff I didn't notice. That was actually Fluttershy talking. I'm going to go edit that now.
6690693 I actually appreciate these kinds of comments because they help me as a writer. Thank you.
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No problem, and if you'd like a beta reader, I'd be willing to do so.
6690023 Take your time! We'll all be here waiting!
6691281 I might take you up on that offer. As soon as I finish writing the next chapter...
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Just kidding Take as long as you need.
6731782 sorry, I got caught up in something else.
6732420 It's fine, I was just joking anyways
6735447 I have a goal to get it done before Christmas and upload the last chapter on Christmas day.
Update? That is if you dont mind me asking, um, sorry.
I love this story
so fluffy-luffy
when is the next update gonna com
Can you please update