Displaced fic check. Got sent from my home to Equestria and got turned into Gregar, not a bad trade off if I do say so myself. But for some reason I feel as if an old enemy of mine is out there waiting for me among the shadows. Only time will tell
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more please!
6520286 Oh don't worry, there will be
forgot a word
change "know" to "now" or change "warn" to "let"
too fast
seems like you forgot some words, "so you can adjust and don't blindly attack everything"
Over all enjoyed it so I'll continue to let you know when I find something that seems odd or when a word seems to be missing.
as a great man once said, MOOOOOOAAR!
6523598 thank you for noticing, I easily type slower than how my brains works.
6523770 CALM DOWN MATE, there will be time for more. All I can give is next chapter is going to be big.
6523971 ok.
This seems interesting, but you need to slow things down a bit. Goes from wake up, to timberwolves, to Canterlot invasion to killing changelings in what feels like maybe an hour. Speed is all well and good, but letting character traits develop normally is what makes a story good. This isn't a race to the finish, it's a story. Describe stuff, like what form of Gregar is he? Is he the purely virtual one, the projected one, or some hybrid version? List off the different features of each battle chip as they become relevant, because otherwise he is just running around with Megaman gear for both arms, and their is already a dedicated Megaman X series Displaced.
6550964 Well that is why the next chapter will better explain things, though yes i can see that it is rushed which is why I am going to slow it down starting next chapter