Ever wake up in morning and for a few short moments you can only remember bits and pieces of your self? Ha, well that of think but expand it to about your whole life, that is what my life is now... Sounds fun right? Ya i don't think so
Well that was abrupt. So that unicorn guy was a shaman who liked hurting things more than his tribe did as well as being naturally evil, I don't know what to say about that but at least he has a story that makes sense. Oh and 5 bucks says he makes a reappearance because he hacked life for infinite lives. Ok Its that time again my friend, that's right the critique. First off the story for the unicorn bad guy here was again rather short and gave a bare minimum for his character (If this is the last time we see him it doesn't matter, if he reappears give him more). You have really improved with the spelling errors from what I see only problems here are you aren't capitalizing solo 'I's and a few words are missing or taking the place of another. That's all I got this time and I still am enjoying the story and it's kind of sad to see the buffalo already go they sounded like they'd have been interesting foes later on. As always keep on writing and improving and I can't wait to read the next chapter.
6191102 Well, thats pretty good to hear. I wont give any spoilers or hints on what the situation with the Wild Buffalo or the unicorn until its time but i am glad you are enjoying it!
6191144 It's a good story and I enjoy good stories. Also glad to hear that your glad to hear that you are improving cause its's always nice to hear... did that make any sense? i think so but whatever as always can't wait for the next chapter!
Well that was abrupt. So that unicorn guy was a shaman who liked hurting things more than his tribe did as well as being naturally evil, I don't know what to say about that but at least he has a story that makes sense. Oh and 5 bucks says he makes a reappearance because he hacked life for infinite lives. Ok Its that time again my friend, that's right the critique. First off the story for the unicorn bad guy here was again rather short and gave a bare minimum for his character (If this is the last time we see him it doesn't matter, if he reappears give him more). You have really improved with the spelling errors from what I see only problems here are you aren't capitalizing solo 'I's and a few words are missing or taking the place of another. That's all I got this time and I still am enjoying the story and it's kind of sad to see the buffalo already go they sounded like they'd have been interesting foes later on. As always keep on writing and improving and I can't wait to read the next chapter.
6191102 Well, thats pretty good to hear. I wont give any spoilers or hints on what the situation with the Wild Buffalo or the unicorn until its time but i am glad you are enjoying it!
6191144 It's a good story and I enjoy good stories. Also glad to hear that your glad to hear that you are improving cause its's always nice to hear... did that make any sense? i think so but whatever as always can't wait for the next chapter!