Sup dude pretty good story so far, but if you don't mind some constructive criticism you use the words he, him, and his a lot. So when you're editing and find a sentence like that you could try to find a different way to say the same thing. Just a suggestion.

6137140 I'm trying not to narrate the story. so i use he, his etc and from the thoughts or dialogue i would think people would understand who I was referring to.

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Look up how to do 2nd person view of stories. What you want to do it 2nd person, but your use of the terms of he are waaaay too much. Every sentence has it. Nearly every sentence starts with it. He/him is used too much, even for the use that you want it for. This is just a very long heeeeeeeeeeeeee