This story is interesting. Hope to see more of it.

and place

placed*?

pour unhindered

isn't it poured or something?

Gerald accomplished goal?

his* goal?

Interesting. I do not know who Gerard is but I'm willing to learn. Can you gimme a link to the original?

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Thanks for those catches. I'll look into them.

I'll link you to the original tomorrow, it was much more ambitious than mine.

Gerald, oh He'll be fun. The next chapter will be a lot more about him personally.

6091978

Link as promised.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/34443/starfall-arisen

6100057 Is this YOUR rewrite? Why do I mistake you on the original author?

6100122

This is MY rewrite. The original chapter is mostly intact, but the other displaceds will not make an appearance. Elements from Total Eclipse's story will be present, but adjusted for the new narrative direction. Total Eclipse was going to do a rewrite, but found his idea too ambitious.

6100279 I feel that. I however don't get how Displaced stories work. I mean I know the deal... but must this connect with any over-arching lore or something?

6100530

Oh, that's what you mean. There is an over- arching lore, but it mainly only concerns stories focusing on characters directly involved with Gods and other high-tier universal/ multiversal beings. The only thing us small stories really have deal with is being 'displaced' by something and coming to Equestria with different than they were before.

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by something and coming to Equestria with different than they were before.

I don't follow. For example I wanted to do the reverse... I mean displace a pony or two ((the princesses)) and give an identity to the merchant. Now whether or not the merchant would displace more people or whether I'd mention him even doing that that's another thing. I mean... the merchant could have multiple idenitities... ones that one may not know the other.

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I'm unsure if a 'Displaced' story with the premise of a displaced pony would fall into the moderation's idea of canon. As for the Merchant, there should be a thread about him and other displaced creators in the Displaced forums. I can't really comment on him, seeing as i'm avoiding him as much as possible.

6103721 Can you gimme some links to sources where I can look out for these stuff? And btw I don't think I care too much about this if I ever start doing that fic.

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Here you go. It's pretty easy to avoid anything you don't want to include.

http://www.fimfiction.net/group/205425/displaced/thread/162491/displaced-makers-pantheon-aka-the-many-many-merchants

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1t1-u4ksxey_SEv4j3Es0pxNwfeHEcatJ9ZS_goC3Kws/edit

6107415 Right. Thanks.

Unacceptable. If Gerald does not end up torturing and murdering Chrysalis I will be very mad.