Absolutely amazing work, Mr. Man! You keep doing what you're doing and you'll never disappoint!

That build up was a touch slow but quite worth it in the end.

I liked it.

~Skeeter The Lurker

That was actually a really good portrayal of Trixie, and I find myself not caring that she doesn't become a tad more modest. Two thumbs way up

Exellent work! I love how in character you kept Trixie, if she ever caught sight of a male she approved of i can fully see her doing Everything she did in this fic, heh, instead of giving compliments to the guy she liked she would describe how Amazing she is and that he should be happy that she is considering him worthy to be her hubby, gotta love that mentality of hers.

and boy do I want to be that guy, he so lucky

Nice. Assertive trixie is such a turn on. 10 out of 10 would bang her in a heartbeat.

6104307 agreed.

I like how she's very accurate to show cannon in personality but you still have her being rather affectionate and loving.

Just as you go to ask her what she means, she starts to suck on the head of your length. She wastes no time in starting off, quickly bobbing up and down in a fast rhythm. You toss your head back and close your eyes for a moment as you get momentarily stunned by this. Her tongue swirls around your shaft with each thrust, adding to the experience immensely. Not long after this, she takes a hand off of your thigh and starts lightly grasps your sack with it. She massages them delicately with her thumb with an astounding level of dexterity.

I think you should edit that part to 'starts lightly grasping' ^^

Still, love that fic!

“Uh, sure. Let’s get back to work, probably not a good idea to be talking about the boss, if you understand,” you reply before starting to sweep again.

“Oh, don’t worry about that, I don’t even work here,” she says, leaning against a wall and peeking out at the stage.

You look up and start to ask her to repeat herself when you hear some guards come into the room. One of them seems to have a lump on his head and is rubbing it as he glares about the room.

“Oop, looks like that’s my cue. Maybe we’ll meet again sometime, but for now, see ya!” she says with a single wave as she dashes for the stage.

“There! She just ran for it!” the injured guard shouts as the others race towards the stage.

Watching for a moment, you’re impressed to see the mysterious stranger fly up the stairs of the audience and out the door. After a brief pause, you go back to sweeping and then bring the broom that the girl evidently stole back to a supply closet. Just as you leave them, you turn around to see the drummer you freed earlier behind you.

I wanna say...Spitfire? Yeah, that's who I'm going with for the identity of the mysterious stranger. Well, either that, or it was the female version of Revan. (Heh. Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic reference/joke is funny).

Trixie is either going to fire you or lock you in her basement, and you’re not sure which is worse.

And they say I'm paranoid!

It’s almost comical how much people play into her performances.

At least this story has me being as smart as I actually am with the whole "She's just putting on a show, and her stage ppersonality isn't her real personality." Mind you, she's called down a bolt of lightning as though she was ing Thor in the cartoon before, whereas Twilight Sparkle, a pony who is now an Alicorn, which by the very definition of the type of pony would make such a feat easier, has NOT. Trixie, therefore, is far superior to Twilight, especially since if she hadn't called down that bolt of lightning, thus distracting the Ursa Minor, the two idiots who had led it into the town would have died.

“Trixie likes to remind herself of her accomplishment. She used to live in a wagon and now she has a mansion,” she explains.

Achievement unlocked: Putting others in their place