“Dusk and I went on a Bandit hunt after they hurt one of the ponies in Ponyville with Mom.”
Bandits and Twilight hurt some ponies in Ponyville?

610786 you know what it means...

great chapter for a great story keep going dark

610822 Just pointing out a small grammatical mistake.

611364 unfortuanately the Vampirism won't be making quite as much an impact now, though I may think to make impure Vamponies as part of the enemies later

so tell me again , who is selinas mother, and why are you shipping twilights daughter with a mare/filly???

611491 Selina is Elana's Daughter, the assassin that got hurt helping Twilight get through the Underworld. and before it was a friendshipping when they were thirteen, no it's a real ship as they're 18(which in my opinion is adulthood at least for them) oh wait, did I just give away part of the next chapter? oopsies

611741 I've already gotten a few offers but with my writing schedule, speeds and infrequentalities it never works out unfortunately

611803 I'd have to see the original and know your goal to give you accurate pointers but what I can say is to do something unique. something that you never really see anywhere. and if it is something that's fairly common, do it in a way that you'd never think of. listen to your readers, don't say "I already have the story idea in my head so no" and make some light changes to the story based on the majority of your fanbase. get them involved if you can as well and update frequently

Great sequal so far! Just a warning though a time skip can be tricky I have read stories where the time skip ruined the entire story, and I have read some to where it makes it soooo much better. Yea thats just an opinion from a fan and avid reader, but so far your writing style seem like you will be able to pull it off nicely. I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with the time skip!

611903 did you read the sidestory? and We'll just go with magic carried the foal. just popped into existance
611908 sure thing, but try to condense and summarize it so you can fit it into as little messages as possible, replying to PMs is a lot mroe tedious in bulk than comments
612060 well this time skip is from the introductory prologue-like batch of chapters into where the story really begins as they enter adulthood
612083 *she and because me and my friend had a conversation involving me wanting an albino Fennec fox and I would say that so I just slipped that in there. and I haven't named Dawn's scythe yet

i would have preferred it if you had waited with any kind of shipping until after the time skip, and maybe drew it out a bit, not just instant sort-of-confession (since we as the readers couldn't possibly have seen that coming from just reading). like getting to know each other better and having the feelings (both friendship and anything above friendship feelings) grow a little over time.
like: story as it is up to after the fight, they become better friends. *time skip*. non-out-loud confession (either the "sisters" talk about it or we get to read about their thoughts or a previous talk). they think about it when they are with their respective interest. dawn mares up and talks about the relationship thing with selina.
that's just what i would have preferred though at first glance, but since it's you; it's probably going to be awesome no matter what you run with.

612813 sorry, I just took too long to get Twi and Luna together in Night, and then i could only sneak in little ship scenes. this one I'm going for a darker, yet shippier fic.
let's just say a music video i saw involving two women covered in blood kissing is one of my ideas of dark shipping :P

612851
"let's just say a music video i saw involving two women covered in blood kissing is one of my ideas of dark shipping :P"
(<- doesn't really cover my reaction)

613050 i foresee gore spattered makeout scenes!

613089
oh god yes!
as you said, the last one was a little dry on the shipping part, so an increase will be welcome

I love the story but the spelling mess ups make me feel physical pain.

612262

Ahh well i read that but i just felt like it had to be said. Like i said your writing style seems to be one of the more diverse styles I have read in a while. It almost seems like you could take a U-turn in a story and make it seem natural........which you kinda did with the Dim Sun and Lucifer umm it wasnt a twist, but im not sure what to call what you did on that part.

614105 let's just call it a pinkie pie, because it's rather unexplained and random I know what you mean though. and the story is going to take a nice little U-turn and earn it's Mature and gore rating very soon

614441 Hahaha i like that a pinkie pie to explain something completely random and unexplainable, I shall use that in socially acceptable situations. I don't really care if it is gory or "mature" as long as it is good and well written (hopefully i don't offend with that ). Plus it wont be a U-turn exactly it will be more of a hard right cause she is in combat school so that foreshadows that there will be combat. What i meant by a U-turn was taking this story and making dusk turn into a fancy canterlot royalty after making her out to be somewhat tomboyish.

614484 that's kind of the way i envisioned her character to be, to be like Celestia, but spending so much time with Dawn and the things with raiders she harded a bit. she'd still be more than presentable as a princess, just one that can kick your ass without magic :P but i get what you mean

615747 Oh wait I think I ment dawn I'm not entirely sure. I have problems with names it's not your fault I just have very poor memory.

Just started and finished reading Crimson night in 1 day it was soo adictive and now i found that you have started a new one its amazing I want to see more you are one of my favorite writers so far

Brilliant, straight after I finished reading the old one. Should I wait for this to be fully uploaded or should I wait, because it only took you 11 days on the old one.
However the old one was full of mistakes that I would love to go through and sort out however I am not complaining.

"My name is Anko. I have your initial examinations here..." Was the Naruto reference intentional?

“Don't worry, I know, we're too young for that stuff anyways. By the way...(space)what brought this on?” Selina asked.

I didn't really go looking for this stuff but these popped out at me. figured if they didn't get noticed then they aren't big enough problems to really matter. Still, maybe I could go through it and comb out some more so it's worth going into to correct the little blemishes. there might not be many more though.