Her body was learning the obedience brought pleasure, and she was still aching for more.

I'd correct this as to say *that obedience* but reading it as a noun with "the" as a definitive rather than an adverb added a definite dominance to girly Twilight. I don't know if this was an accidental misspelling or deliberate but don't change it. Keep it like it is.

Power. Dominance. It could all he his.

*be.

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Thanks for correcting the error! it's fixed now