One who has become the Sombra in anchient times through displacement, though it wasn't only the merchant who fiddled around as he had taken something else too that would change both him and what object from the merchant.
*attempts to prod others with a tentacle to hear more of their comments about our little human.* Hmmm, perhaps our looming draped over one's shoulder is scaring the ponies or humans away? we hope not as their input may help 'improve' how we twist and turn events.
I only have one complaint. It's really hard to understand what is going on in this story. Basically like who's POV it is and what they're talking about. I like the way you write the dialogue but it does make it hard to keep track of who is doing what. Other than that this story is great.
On a side note our little pony we believe after rereading the first two chapters we have wrote down the character's name as for perspective, but we'll work harder to clear it up given time.
5503633 Indeed it is 'cool' as one says, though tell us how thou feels of our human's journey currently? also the one known as Metal Heart as she had joined.
We know not WHY gems now take like fruits or vegetables
taste?
understand would be a Draconicus Discord
Draconequus. A good way to keep from misspelling his species is breaking it into two parts. Dracon and equus. Equus being the genus that a large number of our friendly four hoofed friends belong to.
*attempts to prod others with a tentacle to hear more of their comments about our little human.* Hmmm, perhaps our looming draped over one's shoulder is scaring the ponies or humans away? we hope not as their input may help 'improve' how we twist and turn events.
I only have one complaint. It's really hard to understand what is going on in this story. Basically like who's POV it is and what they're talking about. I like the way you write the dialogue but it does make it hard to keep track of who is doing what. Other than that this story is great.
On a side note our little pony we believe after rereading the first two chapters we have wrote down the character's name as for perspective, but we'll work harder to clear it up given time.
So, the human is sombra, correct? Cool.
5503633 Indeed it is 'cool' as one says, though tell us how thou feels of our human's journey currently? also the one known as Metal Heart as she had joined.
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since I'm terrible with words...I like it, another!
Metal Heart will be interesting.
5503644 We are pleased by thy response, we request upon future points to be telling us of faults as well the good.
thy story is amazing we hope to see more art thou work.
taste?
Draconequus. A good way to keep from misspelling his species is breaking it into two parts. Dracon and equus. Equus being the genus that a large number of our friendly four hoofed friends belong to.
Still liking what I'm seeing, so far so good.