The only thing vaguely mature would be in the next chapter. (The next chapter is sitting there unpublished, I want to finish the final chapter though before I publish the next chapter, midway through the final, hoping to finish it this week. :) ) And the line that I am referring to, Isn't even in the story, I was only going to put it in if it was deemed a 'mature' story. I'm in the process of appealing the story rating right now, if it doesn't get appealed I'll put in a single, one single line in regards to Candace and Shining Armour that's more of a passing joke than anything, but at least it'll constitute the rating right? Lol.
honestly i was hoping twilight would remember their future, but oh well, its still awesome and I like what you did with it and I cant wait to see the next chapter! :D
6236288 Seems like the moderator who 'approved' it is implying their own fetishes on it, because this isn't a damn fetish story, I still don't get the mature rating. It's good to see that atleast some people can see past that "M"
6236487 Well Twilight didn't go back in time, Only dash was sent through time, there is in fact, another rainbow dash running around in this time period right now.
6237958 Really? Where? Lol, I don't remember writing that word in there anywhere. . . One of the comments from docs (Or suggestions rather) might have went through without me knowing. granted the mods words were "The story is rather fetishistic." So idk.
6238227 I really don't see much fetish stuff in here, i don't see anything that could relate to sex, except the offhand comment about Cadence and her magazine
6238247 Well. . . there might be a small statement that Twilight makes in the next chapter -? not sure if I kept it in or not- About the 'moaning monster from downstairs' that's 'only here when Cadance is here' Lol, I'm pretty sure I removed that though. But aside from offhand comments about Cadance, her magazine, and perhaps one or two references that make it out like Shining and Her had intimate relations. (Passing comments really not anything descriptive, thrown in for comic relief) I don't think there's anything fetishy. Just stuff thrown in for comic relief.
6238576 Yeah the 'real' rainbow dash, or rather the one who belongs in this time period is in Cloudsdale somewhere. She doesn't make an appearance but I believe there is mention of the thought that there is another Dash somewhere around.
I found what you r missing Smiling, the purple unicorn filly replied, “That I’m not just a regular old unicorn?” She “That’s right, you’re anything but.” The pink alicorn said, nuzzling the top of Twilight’s head.
Great so far
So good. It made me want to see the whole story in just 1 day. I saw the story when I was watching thediamondminecart and popularmmos. NIce.
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Yeah, it would be if the damn staff team hadn't changed the rating automatically without consent when it's in no way a damn fetish story.
Love it can't wait for more
6233765 Yeah, I mean, true, its part of the Padded Ponies group, but its quite innocent
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I agree, there is nothing mature about this story. ba-dum tish
I will still eagerly await the next regardless!
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The only thing vaguely mature would be in the next chapter. (The next chapter is sitting there unpublished, I want to finish the final chapter though before I publish the next chapter, midway through the final, hoping to finish it this week. :) ) And the line that I am referring to, Isn't even in the story, I was only going to put it in if it was deemed a 'mature' story. I'm in the process of appealing the story rating right now, if it doesn't get appealed I'll put in a single, one single line in regards to Candace and Shining Armour that's more of a passing joke than anything, but at least it'll constitute the rating right? Lol.
I am so glad this isn't a damn fetish story!
honestly i was hoping twilight would remember their future, but oh well, its still awesome and I like what you did with it and I cant wait to see the next chapter! :D
6236288 Seems like the moderator who 'approved' it is implying their own fetishes on it, because this isn't a damn fetish story, I still don't get the mature rating. It's good to see that atleast some people can see past that "M"
6236487 Well Twilight didn't go back in time, Only dash was sent through time, there is in fact, another rainbow dash running around in this time period right now.
6237897 Maybe it's because you make a brief reference to 'genitals', even though it was never in a sexual, creepy way.?
6237958 Really? Where? Lol, I don't remember writing that word in there anywhere. . . One of the comments from docs (Or suggestions rather) might have went through without me knowing. granted the mods words were "The story is rather fetishistic." So idk.
6238227 I really don't see much fetish stuff in here, i don't see anything that could relate to sex, except the offhand comment about Cadence and her magazine
6238247 Well. . . there might be a small statement that Twilight makes in the next chapter -? not sure if I kept it in or not- About the 'moaning monster from downstairs' that's 'only here when Cadance is here' Lol, I'm pretty sure I removed that though. But aside from offhand comments about Cadance, her magazine, and perhaps one or two references that make it out like Shining and Her had intimate relations. (Passing comments really not anything descriptive, thrown in for comic relief) I don't think there's anything fetishy. Just stuff thrown in for comic relief.
6238380 That's what i said, there's nothing 'cloppy' here.
6237899 oh wow
6238576 Yeah the 'real' rainbow dash, or rather the one who belongs in this time period is in Cloudsdale somewhere. She doesn't make an appearance but I believe there is mention of the thought that there is another Dash somewhere around.
I'm lov'in it
Adorable levels are passing 'Diabetes inducing'...
My Goddess, it's over 9,000!
I found what you r missing
Smiling, the purple unicorn filly replied, “That I’m not just a regular old unicorn?” She
“That’s right, you’re anything but.” The pink alicorn said, nuzzling the top of Twilight’s head.
You have grammar mistake lol