Divine

by lingonberries

Haphazard Inquiries

I trotted down the dark street in silence, staring at the ground. It was very quiet; the only sounds were the moving of my yellow hooves against the dirt and the occasional crow cawing. Everypony was in their houses, probably sleeping right now. The light breeze blew my wavy lime green mane back slightly. I sighed, and a frown tugged at my features. What am I doing?

I had no idea why I was going to Twilight Sparkle's library at the dead of night. It was almost like my small hooves had a mind of their own; I had simply gotten up and left the small cottage where I lived.

I yawned and picked up my pace; hopefully Twilight wouldn't mind that much. She did say that I was welcome to come over anytime, being one of her favorite fillies.

Not long after, I saw the shadow of the huge library carved into the oak tree. I strode up to the doorway, took a deep breath, and knocked softly. I wondered if I was just stupid as I heard hoofsteps from inside. The door creaked open to reveal a small purple dragon.

"Hello?" He asked. "Oh, uh, hi, Midnight." He mumbled awkwardly. "What are you doing up at this hour?"

I gave him an embarrassed look. "I was hoping that I could talk to Twilight for a bit..."

"Oh! Uh, sure, I guess; I'll have to wake her up." He said. "Come inside and make yourself at home."

I stepped inside gratefully, shutting the door with a little click. I heard voices upstairs, and not long after, Twilight Sparkle staggered down the stairs. When she saw me, she quickly righted herself.

"Hey, Midnight." She said through a yawn.

"Hi," I mumbled.

"What's up?" She questioned. "Spike said you wanted to talk to me."

I nodded. "Yes, if that's alright. Sorry for interrupting your sleep."

"Nah, you're fine," Twilight said. "Follow me."

She led me to the cramped living room; a tiny navy couch dominating most of the space. She plopped down on it, and I mimicked her. She then turned to me, waiting for me to speak.

I cleared my throat and gave an awkward grin. "So, uh, I wanted to talk to you about... My cutie mark."

Twilight nodded, and her red glasses floated over from nowhere, courtesy of her horn.

"As you might've heard, I'm the last filly in my class not to earn it yet. I've tried everything, but I always fail. All I seem to actually be good at is watching YouTube, and everypony says that's a useless waste of time. I just don't know what to do..." I announced, looking at her hopefully. "Any suggestions?"

Twilight pondered her responses. "It seems to me like your special talent has something to do with YouTube..."

"But everypony says -"

"It doesn't matter what your peers say, it's only what you think that counts. It is your cutie mark, anyways," Twilight declared, her huge purple eyes boring into mine. "Trust me."

I nodded and gave her a tight embrace. When we broke apart, I asked, "So do you know anything I could do to help ensure my earning of my cutie mark?"

"Just keep doing what you're doing. If your cutie mark does have something to do with YouTube, then you're on the road to success."

"Okay!" I squeaked as I portrayed a toothy grin. "Thanks for letting me come over!"

"Anytime," Twilight beamed.

We got up and she led me to the door. She opened it and took one look outside before coming to a conclusion of "You're staying here tonight." We both smiled, and she led me upstairs to her bedroom.

"Yay! Slumber party at 3 am with one of my favorite little fillies!" She said enthusiastically before we both broke down in a fit of giggles.

Three hours later, I was woken up by the sound of songbirds chirping outside. We had fallen asleep during The Twilight Saga: Eclipse, one of Twilight Sparkle's favorite movies. (Don't ask why!) The intro was still playing, over and over and over again, the signature tune playing in the background. We were surrounded by empty hay bags and melted oat lattes from our party last night. Spike was draped over a stack of books near us, having also fallen asleep during the movie. I yawned loudly, making my horn spark a bit. This woke Twilight up, and she immediately noticed the Twilight intro playing infinetly on the TV.

"We fell asleep during Eclipse?!" She shrieked, bursting my eardrums and waking up Spike at the same time.

Poor Spike groaned from the tower of books. "Wha?"

Twilight screamed dramatically, which caused the stack of books Spike was on start to teeter.

"Oh Celestia-" Spike choked as the pile began to topple.

I leaped out of the bed and dizzily tried to run over to the imploding pile. But, I tripped on none other than a book and fell face first into the wood. I looked up to see Spike covered in books. He huffed and sat up, a small scratch adorning his cheek. I felt my muzzle; I had bumped it pretty badly.

"Ugh," Spike groaned. "Wow, Twi... An avalanche?" He asked in a scratchy morning voice.

"Well, we did sleep through my favorite movie..." She smiled. "Now, I guess we have to rewatch it!"

Spike made a noise that sounded precariously like a swear.

"Yeah, whatever," he said. "I'll go get breakfast started."

I fell back into the bed and yawned, getting ready for the next marathon.

Not far into the movie, Spike called to us from below. "Breakfast's ready!"

"Okay!" Twi yelled as she paused the movie. "Luckily, that was at a nonimportant part." Twilight muttered half to herself.

We trotted downstairs to be greeted with a huge array of pancakes, bacon, sausage, hashbrowns, and fried potatoes. Spike stood to the side proudly, wearing a fake mustache.

"Look good?" He asked, trying and failing to do an Italian accent. He twirled his mustache and grinned.

We rolled our eyes. "Spike," Twilight said playfully.

"What?" He said innocently in his normal voice. "You can eat, if you want. I've already eaten my share."

"Okay," we said in unison. Then, we dug in.

After at least 7 more hours of watching the Twilight movies, I headed home, promising to come back and visit again soon. As soon as I arrived home, I was ambushed by my parents.

"Midnight!" My mom shrieked. "Did you have fun?"

I nodded.

"Good. As long as you had fun, that's all that matters!" She said happily.

Then, I felt a flutter of wings on my shoulder. I knew it was Isak, my pet bat. He had green translucent wings and brown fur, with the cutest little beady eyes. He squeaked and glided to my bare flank, pointing at it and shrugging.

"No, not yet..." I told him. "But she thinks that my cutie mark may have something to do with YouTube!"

He chirped, and his eyes went wide.

"I know, right?" I laughed, stroking the soft fur on the top of his head. "Hey, wanna watch Pewds and see if we can't get more of a head start on this cutie mark?"

He squeaked and nudged me. I took this as a yes, and he followed me to my room, where I grabbed my laptop and threw myself onto the bed. He nestled himself in my hair as I pulled up YouTube.

"So... Which one do you want to watch?" I asked. He immediately pointed at the first one: Human Simulator 2015: HANDS?!

"Oh, human sim... I love those ones." I said partially to myself. "This was uploaded yesterday though... How did we miss it?"

"How's it goin' colts, my name is Peeeeewdiepie!" He started with a silly grin. "Today we're gonna play Human Simulator 2015. It's brand new, so don't expect me to be any good at it..."

After watching the full 18 minutes and 43 seconds of laughs, guffaws, and rage, I was breathless. I keeled over face first onto the bed and grabbed the covers, pulling them over my head. Slowly, my face went back to its normal pastel yellow, and I could breathe again.

I then realized that we had skipped lunch, and it was almost dinner time. I stood up and slowly picked Isak out of my hair, laying him on the pillow. Then I galloped to the kitchen, almost tripping down the stairs. I yanked a bag of barley from the cupboard and made a peanut butter and barley sandwich. Then, I made the same for my parents, who were both sitting in the living room; I could hear snoring from my father.

I was about to balance all three plates on my head until I got an idea. I hadn't tried it in a while, because I always failed. But maybe...

I stepped back from the counter and put on a poker face, crouching into a deep karate - like stance. I conjured up the faint green glow in my horn and took a deep breath. I then willed my magic to spread over to the plates and... Levitate them. Surprisingly, the magic aura obeyed. I had never gotten this far, so I was nervous as I jerked the plates up into the air. I thought I was sweating because of the effort, but then I realized that it was just nerves. This wasn't hard; it was just levitating plates. Calm down...

I slowly stepped out of the kitchen, still magicking the plates. I tiphoofed to the living room, hearing my father's snoring.

"Look Ma, no hands!" I said from directly behind her, making her jump and turn to see me levitating the plates.

"M-midnight..." She said, placing a hoof over her mouth.

"Blaze! Wake up!" She said, shaking my father awake.

"Hmm?" He mumbled as he lazily opened his eyes.

"Look at her!" My mother exclaimed, pointing a hoof at me. "Come over here, Midnight!"

I proudly walked in front of them, plates floating by my head.

My father's eyes went wide. "Good job!"

"Thanks! A-are you hungry?" I stuttered, caught up in the moment.

"Totally!" He exclaimed. I carefully levitated him a sandwich, doing the same for my mother as well. I finally settled on the floor next to them, still levitating my sandwich.

"Now I'm going to try to eat this without my hooves!"

I brought the meal to my mouth and took a bite, successfully smudging peanut butter on my muzzle. I kept doing this until it was gone, my hooves behind my back.

"Ta da!" I squeaked as I cleaned up everyone's plates.

My mother chuckled. "Wow, it took me a long time to be able to do that; much longer than you. You're a natural!"

"I guess so." I said, levitating the dirty plates into the sink without moving so much as an inch. "Now, for levitating myself!

"Oh no, not yet, you silly filly!" My father said, patting my head.

"Oh, alright..." I grumbled playfully. "I'll be sleeping if you need me."

I trudged upstairs and nestled under the covers, too lazy to brush my teeth. I turned over and saw my laptop, still open on YouTube. The video was frozen at the end, where he gives the brohoof. Maybe just one more video...
I grabbed it and saw that he didn't have a new video up yet. That was odd; normally he had at least two videos a day...

I shrugged it off as a busy day for him and settled with watching Surgeon Simulator again. It didn't cease to make me laugh when Pewds screamed about Bob dying. I closed it up and slid it back into its charger on the desk, laying down and letting Luna claim me for the night.

Author's Note:

I hope you bros enjoyed this chapter! I will try to post a new chapter at least weekly. Brohoof!

*I am always up for any constructive criticism / recommendations.

Comments

[FrostWindsMinty]

Not really that bad so far

Although, most people aren't big fans of OCs being friends with main characters (or Mane) so you might not got much positivite feedback with Midnight being a friend of Twilight's (espically being one of Twilight's favorite fillies) really or the Painthoof having Rainbow Dash train her. Also, the Rainboom is hard and was even considered a legend when Rainbow Dash was a filly, not just about any pony can be capable of doing such so it would take much effort to pull such performances off, not matter how much you train. Rainbow Dash was only able to do it 3 times in the series so far (when she was a filly proving it was real, in the episode Sonic Rainboom, and in a CantelotRoyal Wedding part 2) And she doubt she would do it again in the episode Sonic Rainboom so it has been years since she last did it as a filly since Lauren Fuast confirmed the Mane Six to be
"Kid-like adults". And we seen she struggle with it.
You might get some negative feedback for having a OC easily pull it off and even Nick-naming it a Paintboom.
Also, not to be rude but there are thousands of OCs with the name Midnight Shine and Painthoof. I'm not saying you should change them; keep those names if you want but thousands of OCs have such names so some readers might not think of you as creative with naming OCs.
But other those problems, the story is decent and fine but you could be a bit more descriptive and the story seems mainly of certain character's dialogue.
But once again, not bad but could some work.

Have a bro-fist-hoof my friend

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[lingonberries]

5458405
Heh, thanks. My friend is Painthoof, and she demanded that she do a sonic paint-boom and be trained by RD...
So yeah, maybe I'll secretly change those / save them for later...!
But thanks for the feedback!

[The Eternal Dragon]

Mostly what FrostWindsPaw said. To add more, most of my issues were plot points, such as her relationship with Twilight and Painthoof's relationship with Rainbow Dash. It seems rushed that there's little explanation as to why she's so close to Twilight that I hope gets fleshed out in later chapters. Same goes with Painthoof. The paintboom thing should have been given more time before being shown in the story, like maybe introducing painthoof's character training and trying to perform the move flows a lot better than that being literally the first thing we see from her. A major problem with those two things is that it make your characters seem like mary-sues, which is generally frowned upon from just about anyone.

I'll be honest though, this is a lot better written than I was expecting from the premise. I'll definitely follow this story and try to help you. That is, if you want me to.

[FrostWindsMinty]

5460974

Haha, I've seen your profile and I see she is indeed your friend.
I wonder what reaction she'll have if she were to find out...

And you're quite welcome for the feedback
Since I'm a Pewdiepie fan myself

I'd be happy to stick around in case you'd want some more feedback and help to get you around this story. This story is far written better than I was expecting it to be compared to anything I could write. Also, thanks for the surprise follow!

[lingonberries]

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Thanks for the feedback!
I'll most certainly remove the paintboom part and save it for later; I don't want to be accused of having Mary Sue oc's again!
:D

[lingonberries]

5463848
I'm guessing she would probably, like, shove a muffin down my throat.............
:3
But, yeah, that would be great! I'll go in and fix a bunch of errors right now.
Thanks!

[lingonberries]

5458405
Oh yeah... I just finished with patching up that chapter; do I have to submit the whole thing again for it to be viewed? It is published and saved... :/

[The Eternal Dragon]

5466643
As long as you saved after editing, the changes are made for others to see right away.

[FrostWindsMinty]

5466643

It's fine and the Paintboom part is gone now.
:)
By the way, I'm just guessing, but my best guess is that Midnight's special talent is making her own videos and being a YouTuber herself? Just guessing!

[lingonberries]

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Heh, yeah. I actually do youtube :3
Her talent will basically be doing youtube herself as well as still watching Pewds.
Hence that her cutie mark is a brofist. :3

[Serefin]

5489472 Damn, I was kinda hoping to steal that theory and claim it as my own...