Chapter 1
A Gift Of Chaos
Chapter 1
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A a simple cottage on the outskirts of ponyville is where our story begins...
Shimmering snow flakes fell outside, landing sofley on the earth below, minty cold air coves the land like a blanket as the show reflexes the light from celestia's rising sun sending silver streaks of light across twisted bark of the once green trees.
Fluttershy looks out from her kitchen window, small amounts of Frost starts to gather on the glass making her view fuzzy but she dosent mind , fluttershy is one of the few ponies to love winter and understand it's propose but at the same time she worries for all her little critters that sleep deep beneath the ground.
Cleaning the last cup, Fluttershy noticed angel still asleep on her sofa his fur looked like fresh layed snow, she loved to see him peacefully sleeping, his chest rising and falling with each breath, a smile comes upon her face, with a shy sigh, fluttershy remembers the resion she was active that morning, it was heart warming eve.
her friends where joining her for a celebrating later that day all the ponies have been busy lately therefor they haven't seen each other, it was fluttershy idea and she had sent the invits herself, a small part of her mind hoped that all got their invitations after all it had taken her weeks to find out her friend plans.
Twilight was with her family in canterlot, pinkie pie was helping the Cakes design the perfect hearth warming cake, applejack was getting her orchard ready for winter, rarity was designing a new winter dress for Safire shore and rainbow had been spending a lot of time with soarin.
Fluttershy give out a timid giggle at the thought of dash been all shy and girly around soarin, she knew dash had a huge crush on him but fluttershy still found it funny and cute, After drying her cup she places it back onto a shelf and moves to her living room.
A large tree towers over her room it was decorated with fairy lights and little ornaments, 6 glass borbles with her friend cutie marks painted upon them where clearly displayed, under the tree was 6 presents one for each of her friends and one for a special friend who would also be joining the fun later that day.
Getting cozy Fluttershy snuggles up against angel and pulled a knitted blantet over her and her bunny to fight way the cold, a graceful smile covers her face as she drifts into her dreams.
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Knock knock
A noise woke fluttershy from her nap, it toke her a few moments to realize some pony was at her door, hopefully she wished it was one of her friends,Pulling the door open a wall of cold air hit the cream Pegasus before she noticed her visitors, it was pinkie pie upon her back was a dark pink saddleback with 3 balloons on it, behind her was applejack who also have a saddlebag on but hers was boring and brown, it looked old, the 2 earth ponies smiled.
"Howdy sugercube, can we come in?" Applejack asked as a shivering ran down her spine.
"Ow of corse" Fluttershy gracefully moved aside allowing her friends to enter, pinkie is the first to come in she bounced high above normally earth ponys heights she was followed by applejack who tuns and gives fluttershy a hug, fluttershy had missed hugs from her friends it seemed far too long since they had all last met.
Fluttershy had almost closed her door when a voice stopped her "Fluttershy!" Exclaimed twilight as she and rarity trotted up the shy Pegasus garden path.
"Girls, glad you got my invatasion" flutteshy whispered back loud egnoph for them to hear, The unicorns give fluttershy a hug before passing her and entering her home,
Applejack, twilight, rarity and fluttershy had settled down on the sofas that stood in her warm living room, pinkie was curled up on ground in front of the fire as it crackled giving the room heat, for a moment the room was silent but it was a peaceful slence.
"Where is dash?" Twilght asked breaking the silence
"Not sure dear, i was told she was with soarin" explained rarity
Knock knock knock
"Speak of the devil" giggled applejack as the friends watched fluttershy move the the door and open it allowing the heat to escape again.
"Hey flutters!" Smiled rainbow dash, standing awkwardly next to her was a large baby blue stallion.
"Ow you must be soarin?" asked fluttershy, she allowed some of her long pink mare to fall over one of her eyes.
"Yer nice to meet you" he nodded his head is creating befor looking at rainbow, "well I gotta get going!" His face was full of disappointment
Rainbow give a girly giggle " thanks for flying me here Soarin."
"No problem " without hesitation he leant over to her and connected his lips with rainbows, Fluttershy felt a little uncomfortable but she didn't mind, it was nice to see rainbow happy with a stallion. it made fluttershy think about how much she wanted a stallion to care and love her, to help her care for all her critters.
"Will you too stop licking each other faces it's cold" complained rarity and she raised an eyebrow and crossed her hooves, The 2 Pegasus said there final good byes and Soarin flew into clear winter sky.
As dash stepped inside her checks burned, "looks like some pony is in love" kindly teased rarity who received a deadly glair from rainbow, all the mare burst out in laughter even rainbow who had no sat next to twilight on the smaller sofa.
"Should we exchange presents" asked twilight as she levitated her saddle bag from the corner of the room.
"Yey presents!" Yelled pinkie waking angle bunny from his sleep, the pink mare bounced over to her yellow saddle bag, After all the ponies had gathered their bags Fluttershy sorted the presents from under the tree, the friend agreed to start with rarity.
"Eeeeeek" grinned rarity as she opens the four present she receives, purple cupcake with blue sprinkles from pinkie pie , a fashion book from twilight, a apple pie from applejack and a purple gem from rainbow dash's travels to cloudsdale "goodness,thank you everypony" rarity griped all her friends in a hug.
"Applejacks turn!" Sung pinkie as she passed AJs presents to her, a apple flavoured cupcake from pinkie pie, a apple book from twilight, a new red saddlebag from rarity and a large apple sticker for her apple cart from rainbow,"mighty kind of y'all" applejack said after giving her friend another hug.
"I'll go nexts" explained rainbow as she sat down on the floor with pinkie pie again 4 presents where passed to the rainbow maned mare, a rainbow cupcake from pinkie pie )flavour unknown), a limited addition daring doo book from twilight, a wonderbolt scary knitted by rarity and a wonderbolt poster from applejack "owmygosh owmygosh owmygosh" exclaimed rainbow she she flew around the room hugging her gifts,
"Me Next me next"pinkie bounced waving her hand in the air
"Ok pinkie your next " twilights rolled her eyes as she levitated the four presents to the pink mare, a baking book from twilight, a jacket for gummy from rarity, some pony shaped balloons from applejack and some cider from rainbow dash, "Yey thanks everypony" bounced pinkie as she hugged the mares.
"Here ya go twilight" said applejack and she hoofed over twilight presents, a purple cupcake from pinkie pie, quill and ink from rarity, a new magic book from applejack and a book called "reading for eggheads" from rainbow dash, "thank you so much every pony" twilight giggled at her present from rainbow.
Meanwhile Fluttershy Sat calmly watching her friends like an outsider until the 5 mares looked at her "here you go flutters" said rainbow as the mares give fluttershy her presents, Calmly she begin to open the one at a time, animals care book from twilight, a pink scarf with butterfly sewing onto it from rarity, some green tea from applejack, a simple pink cupcake from pinkie pie and a smaller blanket with carrots on it for angle from rainbow dash.
A small tier formed in her eye,she was very greatfull to have such caring and loving best friends, Fluttershy lend under her tree after giving the mares a big hug, she brought out a silver present it was tide with a single purple ribbon.
"Here you go rarity" as she alowed rarity to levitate the box to her self, with delicate hooves rarity opened it reviling a silver necklace with a cutiemark charm hanging loosely from it.
Rarity's eye sparkled "I have never seen something as perfect as this!"
Fluttershy then grabbed the other boxes, a pale orange one with a red ribbon, a pritty pink one with a yellow and blue ribbon. A cyan coloured box with a rainbow ribbon and a purple box with a dark pink ribbon.
Each of the mare received there present and opened the hoof sized boxes with care to discover the same silver necklace but with there own cutie mark charm attached, "Fluttershy these are beautiful!" Twilight said as she used her magic to place it around her neck before helping the others to do that same.
" Iam glad you all Like them, I am also glad you all got my invitations!" Whispered fluttershy as she admired her best friend who where fascinated by the gifts.
"So flutters who's is that present for?" Asked dash, her cyan hoof pointed towards the tree where a Gray present sat, it looked left out and almost lonely, Fluttershy noticed this, maybe he was feeling the same way!
"Ow that... That's for... For discord" fluttershy said whispering discords name.
"Ow fluttershy don't be teasing us like that !" Laughed rarity before she noticed the Pegasus mares unchanged face.
"you can't be serious?" Rainbow said shacking her head in a way to convince herself Fluttershy was joking, fluttershy shuffled her hooves nervously trying to fine a response for the confused and conserving looks from her best friends, she prayed for a distraction from explaining the truth.
Her prays where answered by a light knocking from the door.
Knock knock know
"Who in hay could that be ?" Asked AJ, Fluttershy knew exactly who was calling at her door...
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Really Good So Far, Theres A Few Spelling Mistakes But Other Than That Its Fine
Cant Wait For More Chapters 
I like can't what for more :)
Wow over 100 views in under 12 hours thank everyone
'A Gift Of Chaos' is another Fluttercord story I always love coming back to every time.
This was hard for me to read past the beginning. Run-on-sentence after run-on-sentance after run-on-sentence. Paragraphs are made up of multiple sentences, not one really long sentence filled with camas, several of those needed to be periods. Once I got past that error though, the story was good. But run-on-sentences are no bueno
There are mistakes, but no one is perfect.
*groans*
. I only just started reading this and I already found several mistakes.
Delete the second "A" and the elipsis is not needed.
softly
Misty. And this word should be starting a new sentence so replace the comma with a period.
covers
snow
reflects
I'm not even going to finish reading this until you get a proofreader to go over it.
And here's a tip for you. Don't use commas unless you're describing a series of events, items, or actions.
In your second paragraph you have it all as one long sentence interspersed with commas when it should be three seperate sentences.
Also you failed to place a comma before the two instances of the word but which is the only place it was needed.
5262865 A few?!. I had to stop reading at the first paragraph because it was so god awful messed up with gramatical errors that I had to comment on it.
5365196 What he/she said.
Despite all the spelling mistakes, all the gifts for everyone are cute and makes sense. Twilight can't conceive of giving something other than books, can't she? LOL.
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The same with Pinky, don'the they always get cupcakes from there. I'm suprised she didn't change it up and get them, I don't know.....something other than what they can get every day?!? Bookhorse is understandable but Pinkie is un-Pinkie-dictable!
Your English is...um..Hey! Um..was it your first language?
Did that sound rude..?
It did didn't it!
I'm sorry.