So, you're facing a lot of downvotes and no comments to explain? Let me share my two cents.

First, get an editor. I would volunteer, but I'm a bit busy at the moment.

Second, I never read it, but I do know that this sounds like another fic, which has been featured multiple times, where Fluttershy takes in a human.

Finally, using "It's my first fic" as an excuse doesn't work. If it's your first, you should feel an extra amount of need for an editor.

5330258 Thank you for the info, I appreciate it and will think about what you've said

5332228 No problem.

Geez. So many dislikes for a story that is just getting good. I find the story very interesting.