Dear Princess Twilight Sparkle,
It obviously slipped your mind to mention how important hosting parties was to Pinkie. Not that it was an important thing to tell me or anything. No, not at all.
Ugh. I’m sorry, its just been a stressful weekend and I wish I could have done things differently. I came up with this great ‘bright’ idea to give Gilda and Dash an I’m Sorry I Got You in Trouble Party. Didn’t have the party and almost ended my friendship with the friendliest girl in the universe. Ughhh…. I swear I’ll take being hit with Elements of Harmony again over what happened.
Dash and Gilda weren’t really mad at me it turns out, even though they lashed out pretty hard initially. They had just both been really frustrated with situation. Gilda was annoyed that she got caught and Dash was playing the blame game to avoid feeling like she screwed up. She blamed herself for giving into Gilda, Gilda for stealing, me for getting them in trouble and herself again for being angry at me. Neither were punished too horribly, Dash got off with just a mark on her record and her dad grounded her for a couple of weeks. (By the way. COOLEST DAD EVER!) Gilda’s parent didn’t care, but she does have to serve a substantial amount of community service.
Turns out I could have just left the situation alone and it would have turned out just fine, but I had to go and stick my horn where it wasn’t needed. Mmmmmm… You have no idea how good it is to say that. I’ve been stuck watching every idiom for the past few years just so I don’t sound like some sort of freak… not that that matters anymore after the whole demon thing.
So I wanted to plan this party for Dash and Gilda and went about doing everything I thought I would need to do. Word of advice, never say no to Pinkie helping you with a party. She’s pretty sensitive about being thee party planner, and didn’t exactly handle being told I wanted to plan one without her very well. I didn’t mean to be rude, I just wanted to do this on my own. I got Dash and Gilda in trouble, so I wanted to show them that I had messed up and was trying to fix it.
Okay, you got me. I also refused because I wanted to prove that I could do this friendship thing without others help. That I was just as good of friends as everyone else. Ugh… I can just see how ironic that statement is just writing it. Yeah, I screwed up.
I’m worried for Pinkie. She’s as obsessed with parties as I am with showing that I’m a good friend. She might be afraid that someone else will steal her destiny. She became so lost when I told her she couldn’t help with the party. She was more than a just a little hurt when she learned I was throwing a party and didn’t want her help, something changed inside of her. I hurt her bad and I wish I could do something to make it up.
I should probably tell you exactly what happened. After I told her I wanted to do it on my own, none of the girls saw her over the weekend. We were more than a little worried on Monday when none of us even received so much as a text from her. During lunch, we took a trip to SugerCube Corner. The Cakes were really worried about her and were relieved when the saw us. We went up to her room… it was bizarre to say the least.
Pinkie’s hair lay flat against her head and she had a party set up with a bunch of stuff toys, a bag of flower and a pile of rocks. Pinkie seemed so out of it, so lost. A banner was hanging in her room with “WE’RE SORRY WE GOT YOU IN TROUBLE!” written on it. When we talked to her, she responded by talking through the flour, rocks and other ‘party guests.’ It… well… I deserved everything she said.
Rarity and Applejack were somehow able to get through to her and I said I was sorry. I had no idea that she cared so much about planning all of her friends parties. Her hair perked up a little and she seemed happier, (at least, she wasn’t talking to us through Madame La Flour, you were right about her having an imagination). I feel so horrible, I don’t even know if Pinkie still wants to be my friend anymore.
I’m just one big giant screw up. First I run away, I make everyone hate me, turn myself into a demon, then try and take over the world. When I finally do make some friends, I let them down, get them in trouble and hurt them in the worst ways possible. It might just be better if I come home and face Princess Celestia’s wrath. Banished to the sun doesn’t sound too bad right now.
UGH! Just listening to myself wants to make me throw up. I don’t really want that Twilight, but this friendship thing is just harder than I expected it to be. So far I’ve done nothing but fail everyone. Any advice for your failing student would be great.
Sunset Shimmer
P.S Saturday work for tea? I’m free all day.
Other than that, it was pretty grand. Let me say that I love the character development. I know it's difficult to write for characters that already have an established personality and backstory. And the problems that arise form creating backstory for a character that has been seen but not expanded on. You're doing it extremely well though. Keep it up!
5195449 Heh, thanks for the catch. Although I meant thee as opposed to the.
Thanks, I'm glad you like it. Yeah, expanding possible Backstory is one of the problems and some of the fun of Fanfiction. I hope to do a good job. Especially with Celestia's and Sunset's relationship.... It's the one thing Rainbow Rocks didn't do that I had wished they did.
5195477 True, I do hope we see Sunset sending letters to Twilight however. That would be a nice "full circle" moment. Maybe even have Sunset come back to Equestria from time to time.
You'll do great. Just looking over what you've done thus far, I'm confident in your abilities.
Very nice! I like how you actually linked the episodes together, and I look forward to seeing where you'll take this from here.
Great stuff! Friendship is not a piece of cake, nor should it be.
Wow... This story... this story is exactly what I was wanting to see after I watched Rainbow Rocks again. I love Sunset Shimmer and Twilight being together, even as just good friends. The problems Sunset is having with her friends make a lot of sense as well. She isn't used to it.
This is something that Twilight will really be able to relate to as well. She wasn't instantly the best at being friends with ponies when we first saw her in the show. it took time.
I really like what you are doing with this fic. You have Sunset and Twilight continuing where Rainbow Rocks left them off. You are also giving us some of Sunset's background as well. I like how you are showing that Sunset wasn't evil from the start. She became what she was as she was lost in the human world.
From the fics I have read, most of the time Sunset starts off as mostly evil Sunset from the start. Some of them have her ultimate turning happen while she is still in Equestria. You actually plan to show her fall and that she wasn't doomed from the start before the rainbow power hit her.
I also like how you are showing how things were between her and Celestia.
Something I hope to see in the future of this fic. I hope not all of the problems Sunset experiences are more or less human equivalents to what Twilight went through with just a human world touch. Those will still be good, but hopefully you can eventually come up with some original problems Sunset has that Twilight uses her own experiences (though different) to help her solve. This will keep it from becoming too coincidental and make for a more realistic relationship between them. It will also keep the fic amazing in my opinion.
Either way you have a favorite from me and an upvote. I look forward to the next chapter when it comes out. Especially since I finally figured out how to get update notification emails with the new website format.
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Thanks you three. Considering this was just some idea I was trying to get out of my head until I got to my other story, I'm really surprised at all the good things being said about it. Turns out I'm much better at telling a story then I am at showing one.
Hope I can show the Shimmer we all love!
5199385 I'll admit, I'm in part doing episode rewrites because its easy and people are familiar with them. However, I'm not merely trying to do the "Human adventures of Season 1" kind of a thing. I want to show the difference between how Sunset and Twilight deal with friendship problems. While Twilight was Socially blind and refused to see problems sometimes, Sunset can read ponies like Celestia but is so terrified of screwing up that she doesn't know how to deal with the situations.
However you're right, I should eventually branch out. I was going mostly to have Non-show problems be in the chapters that weren't letters between Twilight and Sunset.
Yeah, I really wanted that to be a part of the history chapters, that Shimmer wasn't always evil, that she became the way she was through factors after she left Celestia. I consider the comics canon, and that they put Shimmer on her course, but we see in the first movie the difference between when Shimmer won the crown the first time, and the maniacal face she has her junior year. My only issue is that a short story before Shimmers birthday letter every year isn't going to be enough... and I need to figure out how many years Shimmer spent in the real world too... hmmmm.
But yeah, the Shimmer/Celestia relationship is going to be my favorite part about this. Its such a unique relationship and I want to try some things with it later.
5199709 I haven't read the comics.
I can't wait to see how you flesh out the Celestia/Sunset relationship. Using similar friendship situations they go through with their different perspectives is still a good and great way to start out your story. I just hope you do eventually go beyond that. I have faith you can, but it is your story and it is already really good.
Regardless my thoughts you obviously know what you are doing with the story. I like it already. Like I said it is exactly what I was looking for after Rainbow Rocks. I just hope there will be plenty of Sunset and Twilight moments. To me they kind of felt like the type that would be either bitter enemies or best of friends. The enemy part is over with now. Let the friendship parts sail and see where it takes us! I say.
I've been looking for a story with this premise.
And this? This is nice. Really nice. Deffinitly going on the watch list.
Have a round of applause on me.
5207731 Yeah! I was really waiting for somebody to hit this premise up for awhile, and decided screw it, I'll do it. I saw a few, but they never got beyond the Prologue. So I hope this satisfies people's needs for Shimmer Letters!
Thanks for the like, and continue to tell me how awesome I am.... I mean write reviews for my story.