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equestria is not the name of the planet its just one kingdom just like the griffon kingdom the minotaur kingdom the changeling hivelands and the demand dogs
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*Diamond dogs. Also, fixed where I screwed it up.
Ah- So now we transition to Ponyville. Awesome.
~Wishy
5403797 But at least Demand Dogs is funny!
Be careful with your tenses you slipped into present tense a couple times.
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Otherwise good and you avoided one of the pitfalls of making changes early in the timeline. Namely thinking you have to tell everything in order and cover everything that changed. A story like this is like any other story the past is only importent as it effects the present.
A consistent issue thus far: Past and present tense shuffle. At time of completion (or writer's block) one may wish to select either past or present tense, and rewrite the story to follow it.
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I'm more careful now, as it sticks to past tense.