<Hops onto the pedestal of the grand public forum>
Friends! Bronies! Countrymen! Lend me your ears! Can we please stop making spinoffs and sequels of Cupcakes, Rainbow Factory, and the Conversion Bureau? Seriously, they all were pretty fucking dumb on their own and each crappy sequel has just made them even more deserving of scorn. Any story written in these universes will likely be too tainted by original sin anyways.
Yes, I'm fully aware that the basis of my story is not the most original anyone's ever come up with. After seeing video variations of the Cupcakes story on Youtube, I won't delude myself into thinking it is. Besides, for the purposes of the game and the next volume, the Cupcakes sequence is the failure, and will lead to a bad ending.
Having said that, I do believe I have some original ideas I will be demonstrating in this story. For instance, I have my own theory, which I will begin to show in the fourth chapter, of what makes Pinkie Pie what she is. In the fifth chapter and beyond, I examine the idea of the elements possibly being passed to other ponies. And, after telling scriptural stories, or at least referring to them, in chapters three and four, there are no more scriptural references until chapters seven and eight.
In conclusion, having said what I've already said, if the only critique I get is that my story is a Cupcakes variant; and I get no critiques on grammar, syntax, or spelling; I'm going to have to assume that my story really isn't so bad after all.
Congratulations! You are "Cupcakes" remake/spinoff/sequel #37,943!
This is a failure indeed.
<Hops onto the pedestal of the grand public forum>
Friends! Bronies! Countrymen! Lend me your ears! Can we please stop making spinoffs and sequels of Cupcakes, Rainbow Factory, and the Conversion Bureau? Seriously, they all were pretty fucking dumb on their own and each crappy sequel has just made them even more deserving of scorn. Any story written in these universes will likely be too tainted by original sin anyways.
<Hops off of the pedestal>
I find it funny how the name of the first volume describes the whole story.
Yes, I'm fully aware that the basis of my story is not the most original anyone's ever come up with. After seeing video variations of the Cupcakes story on Youtube, I won't delude myself into thinking it is. Besides, for the purposes of the game and the next volume, the Cupcakes sequence is the failure, and will lead to a bad ending.
Having said that, I do believe I have some original ideas I will be demonstrating in this story. For instance, I have my own theory, which I will begin to show in the fourth chapter, of what makes Pinkie Pie what she is. In the fifth chapter and beyond, I examine the idea of the elements possibly being passed to other ponies. And, after telling scriptural stories, or at least referring to them, in chapters three and four, there are no more scriptural references until chapters seven and eight.
In conclusion, having said what I've already said, if the only critique I get is that my story is a Cupcakes variant; and I get no critiques on grammar, syntax, or spelling; I'm going to have to assume that my story really isn't so bad after all.