4703942 Believe me I'm not very funny. But I will try my hardest to make it hilariously funny. With character development and feels and all man its gonna be a ride.
4704025 Well to be honest he wasn't supposed to be in this fic. But while I was at work I thought up a nice surprise about him and his mom. He will show up. Yes he's with Sweetie Belle. He's just not the main character this time. Its nothing bad so don't worry.
4704072 ok. Oh, and you know how peeves some of the characters you are prob going to be working with are, so please make sure to play your cards right. Oh, and how do you know an adverage 15 year old does nothing but cuss his way into being "cool" all day?
4704076 I was 15 once too you know . And for Rumble's character he kinda like an emo. You'll see why in the next chapter or so. I cant give away all the surprises
Interesting. The shifting between first and third person is a bit jarring. It would be best to stick with first person. Other than that, it's not a bad start. I look forward to seeing where this is going.
P.S. Contrary to popular belief, wearing two condoms increases the risk of them breaking due to the friction between the two. Breaking condoms typically happens when they've past their expiration or are too small. It can also happen if you keep them in your pocket with keys or something similarly hard and sharp.
I haven't even read anything except for the description, and I can already tell this will be hilarious
4703942 Believe me I'm not very funny. But I will try my hardest to make it hilariously funny. With character development and feels and all man its gonna be a ride.
Well, this is a.. Ahem, "different" turn than what I expected. Uhh... Oh, and where is Button Mash?
4704025 Well to be honest he wasn't supposed to be in this fic. But while I was at work I thought up a nice surprise about him and his mom. He will show up. Yes he's with Sweetie Belle. He's just not the main character this time. Its nothing bad so don't worry.
4704072 ok. Oh, and you know how peeves some of the characters you are prob going to be working with are, so please make sure to play your cards right. Oh, and how do you know an adverage 15 year old does nothing but cuss his way into being "cool" all day?
4704076 I was 15 once too you know . And for Rumble's character he kinda like an emo. You'll see why in the next chapter or so. I cant give away all the surprises
4704111 crud, he's 15 yrs old AND emo? Well Rumble, you are kinda f**ked.
Interesting. The shifting between first and third person is a bit jarring. It would be best to stick with first person. Other than that, it's not a bad start. I look forward to seeing where this is going.
P.S. Contrary to popular belief, wearing two condoms increases the risk of them breaking due to the friction between the two. Breaking condoms typically happens when they've past their expiration or are too small. It can also happen if you keep them in your pocket with keys or something similarly hard and sharp.
4704830 Ok I guess I'm sticking with first person then. And I know about the condom thing. Thunderlane is just that stupid. You'll see why.
I like you.
4709654 Same to you.
So..... Rumbles generic teen #1 with a bad potty mouth...... So author is his favorite music rock ot dubstep? Whatever this was so funny im gonna fav.