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I like this story's overall idea, but sloppy execution and a narrative that just doesn't flow well or sound natural drags it down.
5639872 thanks for the input on that. Any suggestions on making it better?
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Just clean up your writing style. Try reading it aloud to yourself to see how it sounds. That might help.
5641374 I'll try doing that. Thanks again for the input friend.