Dat description.

I feel I have no choice but to read to see how strange this can get.

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That's actually quite a story on its own... It involves Alexander Pope and a dramatic misinterpretation of the title of a satirical mock-epic poem of his.

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It... It um. I'll let you read it.

Well this is a freaking must read!

This description is relavent to my interest. This ship is doubly relavent to my interests. This Rainbow Dash prank is triply relavent to my interests.

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Oh my. Teat sucking. I really need to read the rest of your stories. Very, very few authors mention that they do in fact have teats, which is fine! For you to take that risk! Comedy is awesome though, and... now I can't get these images out of my head. It's also canon to me that Twilight mewls during sex. You seem to agree. I like you, sir.

Twilight sounds so cute despite having all of this sexual experience. Stop reminding me why I love it when people write her so cute. And why I love this ship.

Sweaty races and... Yes. Rainbow sultry is a hot, hot voice. And this story is stupidly funny, clever, and well written. I love this. Stop proving why this is the best ship ever.

You're also one of the few authors I know who use tail movement at all. A scary amount of people forget that tails can be used to express emotion and wave in the wind. Stop being awesome. No. Don't. I want part two - ten of this.

Wow. You really went full out with teat play, didn't you? This is like a never in clop, and you are the first author who has done it and I have found to be extremely well done and damn arousing. And cute. Superb descriptions. Someone has a teat fetish! Or... just likes using the body period. Stop it. Stop getting me into more weird things.

I am totally rereading this story several times over. I really could learn from you and TittySparkles on how to expand my clop vocabulary. Well done! Top five of all time from me! And a very good, cute, funny, and adorable story period.

Hail Twi/Dash.

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Well done! Top five of all time from me! And a very good, cute, funny, and adorable story period.

Just... Wow. This is quite an endorsement! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and wrote such praise for it! Thank you! ... And a blog post?!

Or... just likes using the body period.

It's honestly more of this, really. I've never been a fan of focusing on only one or two parts of the body while only glossing over others. I like to think that they have an entire body that is there, that they have tried to explore and find their particular desires together, and only through their explorations can they really find what gets them going.

I was so nervous about this story, since it's my first attempt at clop. I've written sex before, yes, but not for a while now, and not as a story - MU*s only before this. I'm glad to see that I haven't lost my touch and that the skill isn't easily lost. My proofreaders deserve a healthy credit as well. Without them, it wouldn't be as finely crafted.

Stop being awesome. No. Don't. I want part two - ten of this.

It's being planned. Sort of. This chapter was written almost entirely seat of the pants. I need to review it and see where the best place to start chapter 2 would be.

4410352 Top five clop story ever? Absolutely. There is, 'I need to maturbatw' clop, and then clop that captures you on an emotional level and sinks to a deeper part of your brain. This is clopomedy, which is my new favorite sub-genre of clop, and it's fucking fantastic. I'm not even sure I could clop to this it's so good, because it's so beautifully written, funny, and descriptive. That's a major compliment from me. Major. This isn't for my dick to spurt. This is mentally arousing. Although I very much turned on by this. You got me into teats now. Just cute little teats. Like Ponuts. Squish.

Seat of your pants. I see what you did there. I can't write clop without quality controlling it at least twice before general consumption. Not getting aroused to your own work feels... weird.

You need to have five hundred followers. It is a massive, massive crime I have so many more than you. I would switch follower count with you in a flash.

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I'm not even sure I could clop to this it's so good, because it's so beautifully written, funny, and descriptive. That's a major compliment from me. Major.

That is a huge compliment! Wow. Like... The time Meeester favorited a story of mine was awesome, but this... I am out of words. Have more Twi/Dash.

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This makes me laugh every time I read it.

Just cute little teats. Like Ponuts. Squish.

SQUEEEEEEESH! Santaclaus collage of Siberia.

This quote (and original story) was DEFINATELY brought to you by these gentlemen-

Painbow Slash III- Taste the rainbow mothafucka!
Pinkie Die- Cum one, Cum all!
Ytirar- Afraid to get DIRTY?
Applejackass- First come first serve, bitch!
Shutterfly- Fuck me, please
Princess Molestia- Hello, little British boy
Princess Luna-tic- YOULL NEVER MAKE IT TO THE MOON
Princess KKKadence- Hail the princess KKK, Her whiteness!
Princess Twilight "Mothafackin" Sparkle- Go read the story again.

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I am so confused right now.

4410565 I fucking love ponut. My ex got me into ponut over several months, and I have never looked back. Human anatomy on a pony looks weird to me now. Not that I want hyper realistic anatomy, but squishy ponut? Yes. Cocks and dildos and horns go into the Ponuts. Puffy, plush, pulsating ponut.

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Learned something new today. I did not know what ponut was. I am educated now.

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Roll with it

I'd call this a hit! Congratulations, Noble Thought. Praise well earned from KiltedKey.

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Thank you Minds Eye! You helped make it so, you wonderful proofreader you. Thank you again for helping me get this right.

4411377 Lawl. If you consider me better than him you are a silly person. I wrote pony clop and comedy. This guy has the talent to take my niche throne. I happily vacate it to him.

Because Twilight mare teats. Damn. I have a new fetish I will never write about.

I see ice play with Rainbow sucking them in the future.

And remember: Ponut. Twilight had magic. Rainbow has a cerulean ponut. Take it.

I also noticed absolutely no Lavender Unicorn Syndrome in this. I am proud.

Also: Submit this to Equestria After Dark. You'll totally get on it no problems.

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Submitted! Thank you for the advice!

Just saw this in the popular box.

Definitely a hit!

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Yep! It's been in the pop box for a few hours. I'm pretty sure I'm not going to get a feature this chapter. Maybe next chapter. I remain eternally hopeful of one day being in the pretty box.

4412255 if you out out chapter two tomorrow. Have to do it quickly.

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Probably not going to happen tomorrow, honestly. I still need to write it. I've got a basic script outlined, but that's only a guideline. This chapter was written in about a cumulative 8 hours. The editing took about 12-24 noncumulative hours. And I have work tomorrow, too.

I'll work on outlining the next few chapters there on my tablet, probably, if a Sad/Romance AppleShy fic doesn't call my attention, or a Trixie Spoon semi-adventure. The majority of my writing happens at home, though.

this sounds like fun lol....

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It was fun to write, that's for sure. And some people think it's pretty good.

This was very well done. The descriptions are fluid and have just enough detail that a vivid mental picture can be created without going overboard into too verbose. The interspersing of comedy throughout was great, moving through the erotic scene and giving a smile and a chuckle every step of the way. Comedy can tend to work against an erotic scene, but you were able to give just enough for a smile, and then quickly reimmerse the reader in the scene. That's definitely not an easy thing to do, but you pulled it off with aplomb.

I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this.

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To be quite honest, I'm looking forward to where I take this next as well. All I have are some vague ideas. This started out as a one-shot (inspired by a misreading of the title of a poem, no less,) but halfway through writing the second little bit of character/world-building, I realized there was so much more to tell about the couple, and so much I want to explore about their relationship.

I do know what the next couple of scenes entail, but beyond that, I only have a few key tidbits that I want to expand on, some foreshadowing hinted at either vaguely or bluntly in the main part of the story.

I do also know where this story will end, so I have that.

Thank you for taking the time to say what you enjoyed about the story thus far. It really means a lot when readers go into detail about what they enjoyed - or did not enjoy, as the case may be. It really helps me to see things that I maybe didn't see before.

So, thanks again! See you next chapter!

This was an interesting, and hot, story!

I have but two questions:
1) Does the lock ever get her key? I liked the lock, lovely person---thing
2) Does Twilight leave the lock sentient?*

*Would not leaving it sentient constitute killing the lock?