Hate to be "That guy" but this particular thing is a peeve of mine.

Wooden huts mixed in with taller stone buildings that she could tell were a recent edition.

It would be addition, not edition... And trust me, I hate correcting spelling/grammar and pointing stuff like this out, but this specific one just irritates me.

Wow, this is quite a thrill! I gotta say, I envy your writing style for action, mate!

Good so far, can't wait to read more... Unfortunately, since my eyes are getting heavy, it's going to have to wait until tomorrow.

geez. not much on the sex part. but, DAMN! this is one exciting adventure story. you got me completely hooked!