John-117 in Equestria

by Blaze Spectrum

Free Falling (Revised)

Orbiting above the mysterious planet, at the edge of the hanger of the half-destroyed Forward Unto Dawn, John-117 stared, aimlessly down at the planet. He had been wondering for a hour what could be down there.

"Well, I hope my luck doesn't betray me now," he said with a surprisingly straight voice.

"It never has, Chief," Cortana tried to sound as assuring as possible but, John wasn't deceived. He put her back in her data chip.

Also about his luck, he knew it had only betrayed him, about twice in his whole life. One when Thel' Lodamee knocked his Assault Rifle from his hands, the other was the slipspace drive teleported only half of the ship, and he was unfortunate enough to be in the end section.

And that was over four years ago. But being frozen in cryo statis more or less guaranteed that he didn't have to wait, so that was a plus.

"That planet's moon somehow looks surprisingly similar to Earth's, but I know its not. I can name around three thousand reasons why." Cortana said in an attempt to change the subject.

The Master Chief said nothing.

And the populace of the planet - if it had any, would be more than surprised to see him. Unless Covenant were present, they would be scared, or hostile.

"Well, it's now or never," he thought to himself.

He grabbed a random MA5C Assault Rifle, and searched around for some reserve magazines. He found one, and slammed it home. Unfortunately, he only found two others. He would have to be conservative of his ammunition.

After that, he slowly stuck his firearm to his armor's magnetic back.

Finally, he turned around, spread his arms out to make a t-shape, and fell backwards towards the planet's surface.

After a few seconds, he initiated Armor Lockdown and braced for impact.

He stayed calm, Armor Lockdown was even more effective than a Re-Entry Unit. But it'll take a while for him to go move.

He was going to enter the planet the same way he had re-entered at the beginning of The Battle of Earth.

The friction in the air gradually increased, his armor's olive-green plates were turning white, but he still didn't feel much of the heat at all. Although his speed was rapidly increasing, he only barely felt the heat by the time he was flying downwards at several hundred miles per hour, maybe that was because he was a Spartan-II, maybe that didn't even matter.

"Here goes nothing," he thought.

Meanwhile...

Pinkie Pie was at the Sugarcube Corner, happily prancing down the stairs. Her fluffy, pink, mane shook wildly, and her cerulean eyes were closed. A huge, wide, grin was spread across her face. Then, she felt her tail twitching, she didn't sense anything good. Her eyes opened, her smile faded, and a second after all this happened, a deafening explosion was made, right on the street. Either Rainbow Dash had come down. The windows within twenty five meters from the impact zone were shattered. Screams were heard from all around. Basically, it seemed as if the apocalypse had come. Definitely earned a spot among some of the most interesting things that happened in Ponyville since Discord came.

Pinkie rushed down the rest of the stairs and bucked the door open. Rainbow Dash had been roused from her sleep, but was still quick enough to fly over, even if she was groggy.

When Pinkie had only gotten three meters on the street when Twilight teleported to the scene.

Some civilians were saying that it must be Discord's fault, some said aliens were invading, some just plain said that it was the apocalypse.

After that, Fluttershy flew to the area of incident.

It was about a quarter of an hour before most of the group was present.

They all started talking at once.

"I think this might be something dangerous," Twilight put in.

"What?! It is dangerous!" Fluttershy screamed. She then shied away after realizing how loud she just was.

"Aw, come on. It can't be that dangerous," Rainbow Dash assured them.

"Well, if it is friendly, then I'll throw it a welcome party!" Pinkie Pie said at first uncertainly then enthusiastically.

"Well, I'm not touching that crater!" Rarity screeched.

Then in the distance Applejack came in sight.

"Well you never know what it is until you see it, Sugarcube!" Applejack shouted so she would be heard.

"Girls! One at a time!" Twilight cut in.

"Well that's correct, I think somepony listening would get confused," Pinkie blurted.

Everypony gave her a confused look, then just continued with the conversation.

"Applejack's right," Twilight told everypony."We'll never know until we see for ourselves.

And so, everypony cautiously approached the crater, except for Pinkie who haphazardly dilly-dallied to the crater.

Everyone looked inside the crater that had caused all this mess, their eyes went wide. It looked vaguely humanoid. Which none of them were quite glad to note, considering most of the story books which involved humans in Equestrian Mythology depicted them in a negative light.

What they saw was, a humanoid object, clad with dark green metal plates supposedly titanium, where the joints were, were extremely durable but flexible underarmor, a golden visor glinted off the head, and stuck on to it's back, was a gray and black thing, with a scalene-like pyramid with a blue screen with 32 on it.There was another scalene on the back, except below and had a triangular hole. In front of the back scalene, was a cresent surrounded by a right angle, and in front of that, was a black grip like the scalene, except below. In front of that, there seemed to be a torch.

"I don't think that is harmless," Twilight piped up about the object on John's back,"Kind of looks like those things the Griffons used to hunt down ponies in the Dark Age. Although the chance of it being a musket is remote."

"Uh, is that thing on it's back like from those books, what is it called again?" Fluttershy anxiously said.

"...Humans," Twilight said slowly.

"Oh, you mean those things that raided villages and ate foals?" Rainbow Dash deadpanned.

And so, they ultimately decided to bring the inanimate figure to Fluttershy's garden, against her protests. The noise made when it was plopped down on the grass was plenty audible, and any grass that was below it probably wouldn't survive for long.

"Ugh," complained Rainbow Dash."How much does this thing weigh? Did somepony construct this armor, fill it up with cement, and throw it off a mountain as a prank?"

Twilight glared," Your idea has been noted. But really, you didn't do half the lifting."

Then, its leg twitched.

Author's Note:

Revised now. I looked back, and was disgusted by how bad I was. To think how I wondered why it had so many dislikes! So I had a urge to go fix some things up. I won't completely rewrite this story, but expect some add ons, removals, etc. I won't change too much plot points, even if I want to, because I need to tie up more loose ends, and work on new stories. But don't be surprised if this story takes different routes for a while.

Just a note, though, do you want me to unpublish chapters to work on them, to avoid having to read a weird cluster, or should I work on the chapters while they're still up and make a tagged blog post for it?

EDIT: I can't do this.

It hurts.

Comments

[Blaze Spectrum]

If you don't like it, then criticize, not go all.

I would say it's mediocre at best.

EDIT: Please, tear it to shreds, eat it up, and then mail the excretion to me.

[Wing Zero 032]

...so they all know what a human and what a gun are?

[RodBottom]

Just one thing: here is a quote for the tech they instantly recognised.
"sufficiently advance technology is inseparable to magic"
How the hell did they know everything? Just rewrite it with more mystery. The only reason I like HIEs are because they are completely foreign to MLP. don't me discourage you, just keep improving! ;)
From, RancidMuffin

[Blazer]

You mind if I try doing an independent rewrite of this? I'll keep it to myself, obviously, but I would be happy to PM you the results. The idea itself is very interesting, and I commend you for bringing up a logically correct way of bringing the Master Chief into Equestria.

Despite what everyone is saying, and a few bits that were hard to understand, there are quite a few pros to your style of writing. For starters, your attempt at describing the assault rifle is admirable. It's a difficult task that many writers would sidestep with something like this:
"...and stuck onto its back was a strange metal object."
You actually took this challenge head on. Although it didn't turn out the best it could have been, it is an admirable feat nonetheless.

As for the format and grammar, that can easily be fixed if you find someone to proofread this stuff for you.

Don't mind the hater comments. They're just mad they didn't come up with the idea in the first place.

[Blaze Spectrum]

407411 Okay I'll fix that.

[Sarkastik Menace]

So far, so decent... you might wanna say how the ponies know humans exist, (mention that they know from stories, books, etc.) because its really confusing, also a bit rushed.

[Fat Autistic Weeaboo2222]

hory shet

[The Phantom Man]

If there is one pet peeve I have with this chapter, it has to be the Master Chief just jumping from the ship in orbit. In Halo 3 & 4 he fell down with a piece of the ship to absorb damage, then he would angle himself perfectly to slide instead of just drop down because not even the Chief is Immune internal bleeding but other that good job.

[ThatCrazyPerson]

IT'S NOT FUCKING BLACK RUBBER! JESUS CHRIST! WHY THE FUCK DOES EVERYONE SAY THAT!?!? IT'S TITANIUM UNDERARMOR!!!

[Aerin Silverfeather]

3941644 I is actually a gel/based rubber with a titanic laced with titanium.

[Dances With Unicorns]

Imagine starting this chapter after the events of Twilight's Kingdom and the Equestria Girls - Rainbow Rocks movie.  Then, the Chief and Cortana visit 21^st century Earth via the mirror portal and are surprised by the multicolored humans that he finds.  Twilight explains that the humans became multicolored due to exposure to Equestrian magic brought to the human world from Equestria by the portal that Star Swirl the Bearded used to banish the three sirens from Equestria.

After one day of touring that human world, the Chief and Cortana decide to talk to this world’s human leaders at the UN headquarters building in New York City to avoid the mistakes in this universe’s future that were made in the past by his world’s government.  I’m thinking that the Chief would want to stop the colonial insurrectionists before they begin their war of terror.

Also, the Chief and Cortana would make sure that the human armed forces would also have advanced weapons needed to stop the Covenant Empire.  Perhaps, the Chief would create a strong human military and launch an invasion of the Covenant home worlds in this alternative universe, long before the Covenant attacked the human colonies in the Chief’s home universe.

You get better at writing by making mistakes and then learning to write better.  My first attempts at writing fiction or nonfiction were dreadfully terrible.  But, over a few years of effort and training I learned to improve enough to get my articles published in Dragon Magazine, Railroad Model Craftsman, and Passenger Train Journal.

The creativity is strong within you.  Believe in yourself, believe in your talents, and grow stronger as a writer.  Find good friends that will encourage you, support you similar to Rainbow Dash’s parents in the episode Parental Glideance.