It's a very good story, but I have found two things wrong. 1 sometimes the spelling/grammar is bad enough that I have difficulty understanding what you're trying to say, no offense 2 you swear in this a little TOO much. I feel that it's a sign of a bad character if his/ her main character trait is that "he swears a lot" Love it otherwise! Your reader MD
This is a pretty interesting story. I really like where it's going!
Keep up the good work
Tracked! Seems pretty interesting!
yaaay interesting need moar soon please.
It's a very good story, but I have found two things wrong.
1 sometimes the spelling/grammar is bad enough that I have difficulty understanding what you're trying to say, no offense
2 you swear in this a little TOO much. I feel that it's a sign of a bad character if his/ her main character trait is that "he swears a lot"
Love it otherwise!
Your reader
MD