I looks like he has a big problem. Will he remember what his body did? He seems to have been able to stop him from hurting inasense. Is he now Immortal? Or is he going to have to fite for his sole trying to keep that ballans?
the story is good but the character design reminds me too much of Ben drowned and jeff the killer if his face melted away so you can see his tooth is better but what if he gets seen and he must got to get control of the reaper but still give us MOAAR!!!
4401336 Well actually ben drowned's was the one who gave me the idea of the eyes but jeff no i didnt intend on making him look like him but i guess it came out that way i will try to come up with a picture of Marcus and post it for you guys when ever i can
Huh, I deleted my comment? Well whatever, you need to work on your grammar skills. Particularly on capitalizing names, placing commas, and cutting up those paragraphs. I found it interesting that two entities lie inside Marcus and in this scene:
The Reaper looked back at lightning who was still choking on glass. The Reaper opened his mouth and picked up a large shard of glass then he then stuck the jagged side in his mouth and began cutting his cheeks. The shard wasn't that sharp so he had to put a lot of force to get it to cut. I could hear lightning's muffled screams as he saw what I was doing I just laughed even harder.
Is it still Marcus narrating or did it flip over to Reaper?
4443721 i have gotten a new editor and the third chapter was not ready to be published my cousin hacked me and published it with out my say so im sorry for the inconvenience i would go back and fix it but i can only use one arm and hand and i dont have the patience to unpublish it fix it and republish i am trying my best so im sorry if it sounds like crap right now
4399735 i know the answer for your question is really over due and im sorry for that anyway i cant really tell you much about him being immortal or not because then i would be giving out some what of a spoiler but yes his demon and him will be fighting over control his body if that helps you any
indeed I like the story..
I'm home most of the time now. Today was my last day of school. Hooray for graduation!
I'll try to finish editing the next chapter, but IDK if mom wants the computer yet.
I looks like he has a big problem. Will he remember what his body did? He seems to have been able to stop him from hurting inasense. Is he now Immortal? Or is he going to have to fite for his sole trying to keep that ballans?
Dragonfox
the story is good but the character design reminds me too much of Ben drowned and jeff the killer if his face melted away so you can see his tooth is better but what if he gets seen and he must got to get control of the reaper but still give us MOAAR!!!
4401336 Well actually ben drowned's was the one who gave me the idea of the eyes but jeff no i didnt intend on making him look like him but i guess it came out that way i will try to come up with a picture of Marcus and post it for you guys when ever i can
Huh, I deleted my comment? Well whatever, you need to work on your grammar skills. Particularly on capitalizing names, placing commas, and cutting up those paragraphs.
I found it interesting that two entities lie inside Marcus and in this scene:
Is it still Marcus narrating or did it flip over to Reaper?
4402418 i screwed that up i was going to fix it but my cousin published the chapter with out my say so and im just to damn lazy to go back and fix it
4443721 i have gotten a new editor and the third chapter was not ready to be published my cousin hacked me and published it with out my say so im sorry for the inconvenience i would go back and fix it but i can only use one arm and hand and i dont have the patience to unpublish it fix it and republish i am trying my best so im sorry if it sounds like crap right now
4399735 i know the answer for your question is really over due and im sorry for that anyway i cant really tell you much about him being immortal or not because then i would be giving out some what of a spoiler but yes his demon and him will be fighting over control his body if that helps you any
Wow dark as fuuuuck..............>:D
Oh boy, I'm going to be sick. But, I just can't stop reading.