The Fastest Stallion Alive - Origin of the Flash (a Super Equestria Verse Story)
By Sparkfire
Prologue: Dreaming of Speed
Speed, it is a simple word that means to go fast. To most ponies, it only applies to Gods, Pegasi, and Athletes. Almost never has a unicorn ever been associated with the word.
That is, until a meteor crashed in Ponyville many years ago. After that event, rumors started surfacing of a unicorn who could out race Pegasi and Alicorns on hoof. Eventually, it was revealed that the ”unicorn” was an alien that was similar to an Alicorn. It was also learned that he was also this universes’ version of the hero that defeated Tirek.
After learning that, ponies when back to applying the word speed to Those they did previously.
Soon, they’ll learn that the word speed, is simply just that.
Just a word, and words can be applied to anything and anypony
Who am I? My name is Lightning Force.
This is my story. The Story of how I became faster than even gods.
This is the Story of how I became the ‘Fastest Stallion Alive’.
How I became the FLASH!
I guess it started a month ago, or was a few days. I can’t really tell any more. For some reason, time seems to have changed speeds on me. Seconds seem like hours now, minutes like days, hours like weeks, and days seems like months.
Everything seems much too slow to me now. Ironic that the stallion who is always late, is also the fastest equestrian alive.
Anyway, lets get back to my story
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“Lightning, earth to Lightning Force. Anypony home?”
“Apparently not Cobalt. The lights aren’t even on.” Said a Large bald, brown coated earthpony stallion, a with and deep, but low pitch, sounding voice.
Cobalt, a Cobalt blue coated unicorn stallion with a spiky black mane and tail, just nodded. He then bopped me in the head with his hoof. “Dude, what hay is more fascinating that work is non-existent to you?”
“OW!! Cobalt, you’re lucky I don’t buck you into next week for that.”
“Yeah, yeah. What was distracting you? What, Iris get a perfect picture in the paper again or something?”
“I have to admit, I’m curious at what distracted you of all of my CIS ponies. You’re not one to just ignore work”
“Sorry Sir, it’s just that I'm reading about that That RA JAG Captain that helped us out on a few cases, Coldwave. Well his mother was involved in an incident. It’s looks like something out of a comic book happened to her. Well, just read it.”
The two other stallions looked, and were shocked at the Headline.
Freeze nearly Iced by Husband and 10 year old daughter! Son vows to bring them in.
Renown Scientist, Doctor Victoria Freeze was nearly killed by her husband and daughter while she working to cure a Windigo of need to feed off rage and anger to keep itself at a stable temperature. Their attack result in the explosion of the equipment used to keep the Windigo, who Freezes’ assistants referred to as “Nora”, from dying of heat exposure.
The explosion, according to the doctors working on this case, seems to have ‘fused’ the Windigo to Doctor Freeze and altered her body chemistry to the point she can no longer survive temperatures over 32 degrees Fahrenheit without a specially made suit Also, there have been reports that she can’t express any emotion other hate, anger and/or rage, though she can still experience all emotions. {Due to the Battle against Tirek 25 years ago, Princess Celestia has a similar condition. However, unlike miss Freeze, she is reported to not be able to express any emotion, while still being able to experience them}.
As for the Suspects: Icicle Freeze, 48 and Frost Freeze, 10- are considered extremely dangerous. Icicle is a Bald, large build White Unicorn, around 6’ 5” and 1500 lbs* with silver colored eyes and an icicle for a cutie mark. Frost, due being a minor and speculation that she is being manipulated by her father, will not be described. If you See Icicle Freeze, please contact the proper authorities.
Freezes’ son, recently promoted to captain, has vowed that he would not rest until Icicle and his sister were in custody. When asked to elaborate on why his mother was experimenting on the windigo in the first place, he declined to comment.
As Cobalt and Sharp Eye, our boss, saw that story- they understood why I was shocked. Coldwave could be a bit of a jerk, but he was always professional and once you got to know him, he was an ok guy.
“Lightning, this is just bad mojo. Coldwave may not be a member of the force, but he still is one of us in spirit. After you finish up the Grodd case tonight, both you and Cobalt are to head over to Coldwaves’ first thing in the morning. That’s an order.”
Too bad we never got chance. It might have changed a lot of what happens later on.
“Yes sir.” Both Cobalt and I answered
Before anything else could be said, we heard a rumbling sound outside. We were so wrapped up in the Front page news, we forgot to check the weather schedule report. Funny, looking back on this, I didn’t think I be telling this as a superhero origin story. Or that it began on the “It was a dark and stormy night” cliche.
“Storm huh? Well, Lightning you’re on duty in the main Lab here. I’d leave Cobalt with you, but we’re needed to retrieve some evidence from Lab 2, 3 and 4. We’ll be back in a couple of hours.
“Alright Sir, hopefully will finally be able to nail him for those murders and robberies in downtown Canterlot. Maybe King Solovar will finally be able revoke his sons’ student visa, and we can try him as the criminal he really is.”**
“We can hope, I still say we should shove a King Cobra up his furry a- “ Sharp cut Cobalt off before he even finished that sentence.
“Anyway Lightning, Cobalt and I will be back later.”
With that, they left. If they knew what would happen to me, I think they would’ve told me to go with them.
Anyway, as I was working, the storm just got louder and louder. And for some reason, the lightning got brighter and brighter. Figured it was the pegasi trying to be showy with the storm. Little did I know that they had no clue what was happening with the storm.
So I just keep working.
I had just finishing putting the chemicals I’d used back up, when I heard the window shatter behind me. As I turned around, I was hit hard by a massive blast of lightning and slammed back into the shelf I had just put chemicals.
The last thing I saw before time stopped dragging on, was something that will stay with me for the rest of my life.
I remember, because it's the reason time changed speed for me.
A Flash!
Okay, here's the review:
First thing, as a non-english speaker I will not judge grammar nor orthography.
The set is pretty good, a little heavy on the paper article. An advice from someone studying journalism, compaction; only the essential info and nothing else. But the exposition about the world where we are is good and helps setting the ground (it has that feel like when reading thoe One Year Later issues that came after Infinite Crisis).
The conversations about Freeze and Grodd are good too, they help to establishing Lightning as a curious guy as also a forensic scientist and a law officer, no complains there.
And cutting the chapter just as the lighting strikes is basically poetry. Very well done.
(and the reference to the Ballad of Barry Allen is a nice touch)
4209032 Well, considering I'm a piss-poor speller and grammar was never my strong suit, You can judge my grammar. Also, I have no clue what orthograhy (english: the least complicate language to learn, yet somehow the most complicated to use. Even by native speakers of it )
Main problem is that it's suppose to be Lightning telling his origin as the Flash. Him narrating is the main focus of the fic (aka: it's from his perspective). I'm going to need a lot of help with
Technically, it a "25 years later" story. Rainbow is 44 and married to Soarin' (no kids). Making her the Jay Garrick counter-part is going to hard. How the hell am I going keep her Dash and make seem like mentor at the same time.
Then I need work on Flash Facts.
On the plus side, this fics' opening Chapter was better to pull off than "To be a Hero"s' first chapter was.
As a question to you: Which Flash villains do you think Cobalt Blue is an Mixture of? (Should be obvious with one of them. The other not so much unless you know his relation ship to Barry, hell Cobalts' name is that villains' name.)
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Orthography is my misinterpretations of 'spelling' (ortografía in spanish)
You always got the 'out of camera development' just make Dash the wise one and explain that it's experience talking. Jay was very much like Bart in the golden age but then he started to act more wiser and now you know the final result.
For Flash facts you could use physical principles like these ones:
http://heroes-comix.blogspot.com/search/label/FLASHFACTS
You're improving your skills and polishing your style, I can see the advance here.
And Cobalt Blue is a mash-up of Cobalt Blue and Professor Zoom, the first and the last members of the Twane family
I was actually expecting the CW tv show version
Ok, what the heck?! First, we have Ms. Freeze and now Grodd too?! THIS IS THE BEST DAY OF MY LIFE!!!